That’s way too irresponsible than vengeful. The kid wouldn’t deserve having a mother like her.

The effect of Cupid Arrows won’t be too strong, since that would defeat the point of him having alternatives. It would just make them friends.

The how will be his secondary weapon in combat (since he WILL be shipping using Cupid arrows socially) and wind abilities will be primary weapons. Let’s say he’s going to meet a lot of people soon.

This is an ‘Unwanted Harem’. So no, she’s not the main heroine.

Not yet

Thanks~

If that even makes sense, then yes.

Im just slow because theres too many things to work on and IRL stuff.

Took out the stuff i didn’t like. How does one compare the newer version to the old one?

What changes do you think need to be made? I personally got over my obsession with tying my books together, so I’m thinking of taking out the ‘friend’ at the beginning. Character development will stay dark tho.

I’m using the two negatives equal positive principle

You’re the second one to notice. (The other was on Scribblehub)

That’s a good idea.

Isn’t this a bot?

I think “Em... You don’t get it, do you?” would also work.

“Answer me, Xavier.”

I have no idea why ‘a m a t a u r’ is censored....

This chapter seems mostly focus on the exciting incident. We get introduced to the character and the incident just happens. I feel like there wasn’t enough time given to flesh out the most distinctive aspects of her personality. It’s almost like there was introductions to characters, but nothing grounding the readers in their mindset. For example: Hating someone, nervousness for a new school year, passion for hobby, etc. This is where some ******* reviewers would say something like: “You didn’t give the readers a reason to care.” In summation, try focusing on one key aspect of the main character before letting it flow info the exciting incident. After all, it just suddenly happened with no warning...

Why does this sound like a First Person monologue...?

I think ‘Had been like that until now’ fits better for the second sentence.