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Thanks for the chapter. By the way, making thoughts bold makes this harder to read. I would suggest either italicizing them or using single quotes to conform with standard writing practices.
there = location (He sat there for eight hours.) their = possession (Their dog was sick.) You're mostly going to be using 'there', so I would suggest learning the differences or at least using 'there' when you're unsure.
You really need to work on the grammar. Use a grammar checker or something. Dialogue from different people should be on different lines, not jumbled up into one paragraph. Also, names should be capitalized. Nick Fury not nick fury.
Author, you really need to use some spell and grammar checkers. Just using something like Grammarly, and it'll improve your writing immensely. You have a lot of errors all in each chapter, but your story itself is great.
If you want to improve your writing, don't start sentences with 'and'.
Suicide is for those of weak will. I'd remove that part and just have him be murdered by one of the mutants instead.
I like the story but the translation could use some work. The dialogue contains a lot of multiple paragraphs not formatted properly which makes it difficult to read. Sometimes, words are translated inconsistently. When working with multiple paragraphs of dialogue from a single person, you need to put quotes at the beginning of the paragraph.
Wow, I really liked this story until the author just gave up and wrapped up the entire story in one chapter. What the fuck. Why waste our time reading this shit if you're going to drop it? Don't read this as the author gave up on writing it.
The MC has an immortal cultivation technique. It just starts in a Wuxia world, but that's just a mortal plane amongst the myriad planes of a Xanxia world.
What's with the bait and switch, using MTL? Way to ruin this webnovel...