if you do decide to do a harem please for the love of God do not make it Pokemon and do not make it some exaggerated amount two or three four at the most a harem doesn't have to be a smorgas board you ain't got to have every single woman in universe you know what I mean

then post it somewhere else I thought it was a chapter for this story I ain't reading it

thought she called it something like the heavenly foot of pain

I mean seriously come on magic out of all the words to describe it it would be magic not chakra not jutsu not illusion or something no it's magic even though there is no magic

what the hell is the White Snake uses the technique that makes no sense

honestly I think that when it gets into the fight and they start throwing jutsu you start making a lot of mistakes on the translation

that makes no sense

and isn't it chidori

yeah no kidding this just ruins the immersion for me seeing all this ridiculous comments and words used

these little side comment scream out Chinese translation

off to hunt dragons lol

there's species is not exactly known for their beauty bro

a hot steaming pile of crap it's like somebody took a translation did some editing then threw it to an AI that had some bug glitches and then posted it the description of the store was probably better translation than the rest of it I can't even get past chapter 2 it had me pissed off calling the Catholic Church the Bible Church and that's just one of the many problems it's honestly not worth reading not this one anyways

yeah it ain't worth reading just like a hint of the problems is they call the Catholic Church the Bible Church and when he's talking about his dad and I aging after 30 or at least not looking like he's aging he starts saying Carlos did not age at least 10 years which is the MC by the way how do you not age in 10 years would he still be in baby form and that ain't even all it seems like an AI wrote this with a couple of glitches in it system it's not the worst translation but the first couple already had me pissed off

never mind I'm gone I can't keep reading this garbage constant mistakes no I'm not doing it

it is not called the Bible Church Christian Church the Catholic Church well if you're talking about a pope it would be the Catholic Church

then he would still be in a baby form if he hadn't aged at all it's like the author doesn't even pay attention to what is being put into the chapter that makes absolutely no sense how could he not age at all in 10 years unless you're talking about his father but in this little sense there's nothing about his father being Mitch is saying Carlos talking about the MC is this persist I'm going to just drop this and give it a really bad review because that's what it's worth

the way your story is written it is not worth to pay for to read I'm sorry if it sounds mean or hateful or whatever but it's just it's not worthy to be paid for it

that's honestly stupid as hell

that's not even proven