VortexHaze

Will work on it, thank you for the feedback.

Yes it is. I'll take this as a challenge to improve my prompting and better continue my editing skills. Thanks for noticing. Hopefully you stick around and enjoy my novel. My natural writing style is more essay style rather than creative. Hence my reliance on ChatGPT.

Will fix this. Apologies.

Story is written coherently and in logical order. Characters are well written and are able to interact with each other without making me wanna bash my head against a wall. So far from what I've read the magic system is fleshed out and makes sense whether it be from a classicalism point of view or from the point of view of using the cards to cast.

The story is pretty good with a good basis for the world setup and a clear stream of thought put in for the character's actions. Even though the character is confused due to actions of another characters we as readers are not.

Writing quality is decent, story is pretty hard to follow but develops pretty well. Characters are well written and have some life given to them with their interactions. And the world is explained very well. Make it past the first few chapters and you should enjoy yourself.

Thanks for the compliment. Expect more updates tonight, before I head off for the day.

No clue what's going on but I'm still laughing even six chapters in. The truck-kun references were spot on if not a little dark given the characters family situation. The writing style is pretty good if anything just a bit long winded on chapter 3.

The long first chapter, but action-packed and well-orchestrated. Has promise and the author clearly shows his love for the story through his detail put into the characters and world building.

Where are y'all from if you're reading this?