MrNoBody

make tbe Sam Smith song Too Good At Goodbyes

Who is the heroine?.........................

its good, its just that there are too much bullshit in here. Lots of unneccesery conversations and very cringe too. its gonna be much better if you lessen the emotional talk

for those upstairs....if you put it that way then the prison sentences don't need so many sentences....do you really think killing a criminal and killing an innocence is the same? why do you think most people take it for granted when criminals die and sad when innocence lives were taken? REASONS DOES MATTER

He fought existence like bloaters and survive without coma and yet tiger make him in a coma for 2 days? did the tiger become a larger boss than bloater?

now youre just exaggerating. Tiger dodging bullets? thats pretty stupid. 4 chapters just to fight animals 😐😐 and a lot of soldiers died for it.....

I know that you stole the idea and some of the chapters from chinese fanfiction...ive read that book but its a pity its hiatus for a long time. But i guess it would be nice if you continue the book cause it was greatThis is the chinese fanfic that resembles this book : 我来改变行尸走肉世界

I don't know why but MC is so lustful and dominering, such hypocrite (poor sanji)....he grab all the heroines that it makes me sick....and he feels and act like hes the captain...always be the one who decides things. He KILLED every major enemy that are very crucial for the future One Piece ( croc, Mr.2, Mr.3, Bucky(half dead), etc) We literally wont see amazing future story without those people around.... This should be chinese fanfic, because most of MC's character personalities are those kind of characters build by chinese

why you never thought of raising the tempeeature rather than control? what makes you think that fire temperature is fixed?

to tell you the truth, the you choose a good quirk and all but i think this story lacks color and background, i think because the story only use 1st Person view. I think it would be great if you use 3rd person view more often, like others people's conversations (like a different POV other than MC) overall its good