The girl in my eye [gl]

Song Yu, a resident of city B, was once jobless. She was having trouble finding work until she was eventually hired by China's top corporation, SHL. She was turned down for the interview without even being given a chance, and the company didn't even give her a reason. She was very upset because she didn't even have enough money to rent a place to live and because she had to pay for one expensive college course. She learned from the backbench one day while she was attending a college that Jiang Shu, the president of Company SHL, would be visiting. Shu rarely visits the campus because of work.Song Yu thought for a while that she had also been rejected from Company SHL without having an interview after learning that she was enrolled in the same college and class as Jiang Shu. well it's my first time writing novel. I had this story in mind for a long time so I decided to write it here. Comment your views on it..... [ The first 4 chapters may have many grammatical error but you can ignore it]