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May: The Seventh Gray Eyes Mage

Autor: RegenXP
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What is May: The Seventh Gray Eyes Mage

Lesen Sie den Roman May: The Seventh Gray Eyes Mage des Autors RegenXP, veröffentlicht auf WebNovel.May Gem used to be a professional computer programmer in her previous life, after she meet her tragic fate, she was reincarnated in another world where magic exists.As May Gem and her parents doubted ...

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May Gem used to be a professional computer programmer in her previous life, after she meet her tragic fate, she was reincarnated in another world where magic exists. As May Gem and her parents doubted that her magical powers will arouse, she was exiled at the Kingdom in advance before the real day of expulsion. As of that day, she'll face risks on her way and travels until she found what she's searching for.

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