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Consume the light

Autor: goffyboy
Fantasy
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Lesen Sie den Roman Consume the light des Autors goffyboy, veröffentlicht auf WebNovel.Facing the impossible threat to their Empire, the Houses of various nobles were forced to work together. The unknown threat was lurking around Aaron. Enemies were everywhere. It could be your allies. ...

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Facing the impossible threat to their Empire, the Houses of various nobles were forced to work together. The unknown threat was lurking around Aaron. Enemies were everywhere. It could be your allies. In this unsafe situation, how will he face the threat with willpower? Will he be the chosen Hero, everyone prophecies of? Or will he fail to lead his man? Another hero emerged as well, Keiser was a loner. He doesn't trust anyone even himself. He represents death, the bad side of humanity. Will he also precipitate to stop the threat? Will he complete his hero journey like the other two heroes? The last, a little girl full of hope, she was the pillar of hope. The light under this hell. How will she also face that threat? Nothing is sure in this continent. Three heroes were chosen to stop this unknown threat. By who? They will face seven Hell, dragons and many more. Will they reach the light their people wish for? If they reach the light what will they do? Just questions. Author's words. I always want to write about chosen hero trope with a twist. So don't expect a usual hero. The main characters are hard to explain since their origin is weird. Tag warned. It has raped and underage sex. I will not write to them. Just mention those scenes. And had inbreeding. Three povs. And a lot of foreshadowing. The first few chapters are not grammatically correct. I am editing so please read at least 20 chapters or 10. And write a review as well.

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ThePression
ThePressionLv2ThePression

I really enjoyed your story! However, I noticed a few typos that you might want to review. If English is not your first language, I recommend using an AI tool to help with it. Keep up the good work!

Rainandstorm
RainandstormLv2Rainandstorm

Okay okay, just going to say this right now, am totally loving the ML Aaron 😅😅, Like so much... The plot is also well structured and the potentials of this book is highly there

hidingpanduh
hidingpanduhLv12hidingpanduh

This is a novel of epic porportions with dizzying and intense action scenes. I like how Aaron develops his knowledge and powers as the book goes on. I also like how we dive into his past origin of being a son of a Duke, but I don’t remember if you mention whether this is a past life or the same life. Nevertheless I enjoyed reading the latter chapters, chock full of mysterious happenings. You mentioned I’m good at writing character interaction and I think you are also very good at writing interactions between characters. You are able to cause fear and disgust and worry in me as you describe the violence and gory details, when characters get hurt or tested like that weird woman training Aaron in the pain box. One note I’ll touch on is that you switch between past and present a lot and it gets confusing for me, perhaps try to stick to one tense so the grammar will be better as well as smoothening out the flow of the story. I probably don’t need to tell you about the information dumping but just a reminder to think from the reader’s perspective, that too much information dumping all at once can be overwhelming. Even if it is in dialogue maybe pace it so that more information gets revealed slower throughout the chapters instead of big blocks of explanation and not much story showing. I’ve finished up to chapter 15 and I look forward to seeing what Aaron does next in the story and how his origin story will continue, and what will happen to the rest of the characters. Overall I really like the way you introduce new characters and each character really spices things up. Just keep in mind about the tenses and information dumping when you go through the editing process. Keep it up, keep writing!

Slow_Neptune
Slow_NeptuneLv2Slow_Neptune

The story gets right into the action and pulls the readers along for the ride as Aaron (the MC) gets involved with a mysterious organization. The word of this story has great potential but the author needs to develop it more with deeper descriptions. There are a couple of grammar mistakes throughout the story which need to be polished but overall this story has a good foundation.

Greay
GreayLv2Greay

Overall, I must say that I really like the story, especially the personality of the protagonist, Aaron. The plot is well-structured and the story progresses at a steady pace, which keeps me engaged and invested in the story. However, one area where the story could be improved is its grammar. There are several instances where the grammar lacks proper structure and clarity, which can sometimes make it difficult to follow the narrative. That being said, I can still see great potential in the novel. With a bit of work on the grammar, the story could really shine and attract a larger audience. I appreciate the author's hard work and dedication to the project and would encourage them to keep going. I am looking forward to reading more and seeing how the story develops in the future.

OliverfINKing
OliverfINKingLv3OliverfINKing

This review is based on my first impression of the novel, evaluating bookcover, synopsis, tags and the first chapter so it's probable I'll edit it in the future. In the complex a good bookcover and synopsis, for the second one: you could add to It an extract to show your writing style to the web surfer. The writing style Is of good quality but the three different POV seemed stop the reading process a bit too much in my opinion. The stability of the updates isn't much regular, I saw It happened being days without uploads and One with two, still nothing too serious. The story development feels fast, in fact already fromthe first chapter we have many informations about the m.c. and hints about the two probable main individuals of the opposing factions: good (the man in light which I suppose Is going to be exchanged with the m.c.) vs evil (the man in darkness which appears near the end of the first chapter). The characters, with the combination of the short synopsis and tags give the impression of being a bit cliché (I hope I'll edit this parte in the future). The world setting seems to be a modern fantasy type. Finally in the complex I recomend the read.

Magician_webnovel
Magician_webnovelLv1Magician_webnovel

I read a few chapters , it is good , with unusual MC , I loved how he responded to situations. Author , I think you need to check your synopsis.

Dao_lord_
Dao_lord_Lv2Dao_lord_

The plot starts with Aaron meeting up on a date with his girlfriend, In a twist of fate he meets up with a group of mysterious individuals, who save him from a fiery tiger monster. If you are into vampires and mysticism then I would really recommend giving it a read. The only downside is the minor grammatical errors which interrupt the immersion, but it’s not really that big of problem, and is easily fixable.

Augustdsuza
AugustdsuzaLv1Augustdsuza

The synopsis and grammar need a brush-up. It doesn't do justice to your story. Your story has so much potential. The scenes need a bit of coherence and flow. Other than that, it's definitely worth a read. Keep up the good work dear!!!

Mel_goddess123
Mel_goddess123Lv4Mel_goddess123

Love the book already, if you're looking for a fresh intriguing read, hop on this!

Mi_22
Mi_22Lv11Mi_22

The grammar needs some rework in the initial chapters. Narratively, it's packed with good world-building and detailing, with scenes flowing smoothly with no hiccups. Hope, the author has fixed his early shortcomings since the novel already has 15 chapters or so. Anyways, you have a good story, author, wish you good luck!

KoptaMan
KoptaManLv2KoptaMan

Its good needs some improvement and the hypnosis sucks sry for saying that my bad [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=update]

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