mockingbird81
......The story of the novel and its plot is so amazing and interesting.......It's the first time for me to read this type of story about an obsessed mother and her thoughts about her son and her plans to get rid of any girl around him even if it's her daughter but I think it's the reason why this novel took much attention from us .......and wow I am waiting for the updates......please don't be late
The story has potential. I find the pace a bit fast, I guess, but definitely, the plot is interesting. But please, please check the grammar and spelling because even at the first chapter, it has lots of typos already. Nevertheless, it can be fixed later. It's just that, it most probably will affect the fluidity of the reading experience. Moreover, I noticed, there is subtle switching of POV's? Please be careful as it might cause unnecessary confusion to the readers. Overall, it's good and keep improving. Thumbs up.
Nice story. 👍 Intriguing plot. Characters were introduced fairly. The cold Joseph, the poor Christine, and the possessive demonic Celine. (That Celine is really getting into my nerves. Urggg!) Story development is quite in pace. 👍 Writing quality needs proofreading. Switching from 1st person to 3rd person was confusing. (Visible around middle chapter) I notice some typos error like 'het' instead of 'her'(forgot the chapter) Confusing and switching of tenses, past and present tense. (Also a problem of mine, haha) And lastly, the use of punctuation mark on a quotation mark. Usually, commas weren't needed after a quotation mark. e.g. "Addddds?" Instead of "Addddds?", (Don't need the commas anymore) Hope it help! 😊 PS. The last chapter improved a lot. Keep writing. 😄
It has a few typos and gramatical issues here and there. For example skipping short words to complete a sentence. Such as: "I, Too, Off" Those of course are examples and not directed to the actual story. Point is some words are missing. I reccomend you too use "Google Docs". It has an inbuilt spell check and as for gramatic errors, make sure to read and edit a part a few times before posting. It is beyond helpful. As for the story, i did enjoy it. It has twists that would make even a grown man cry. Keep up the amazing work.
This is an interesting story line.wow! I love it. It's really entertaining. Am already addicted to it. I couldn't even write chapter comments because I can't wait to read the next chapter,even when I have load of things to write. That is how good am enjoying. Ride on author . You are doing a good job👍😍😋❤️❤️
......The novel is very interesting...... .....It is the first time for me to read this type of story ....It began with a lot of misunderstandings that lead me to read the next chapters to know what had happened to the female lead .... ..And I really can't wait until its next update... .......Thanks for such an enjoyable story...