Very weird story progression. Firstly, the "extra" contained vital info that would make the book ten times more confusing without. Additionally, the book is all over the place. It's just confusing when there is no explanation where you are, when the MC can see the future etc.. All the author has to do is put time and location stamps everytime a scene swaps. Then there is the random focus on side characters; honestly, it's hard to tell what's going on most of the time when the story is so choppy. Yes, character building is fine. However, in the middle of character building, I also have to go through the author acting mysterious about the two characters that are being developed? Finally, the stupid smile the MC has. I've never encountered a book that made me hate a MC smiling. The emphasis on it gets really annoying(its truly obnoxious.)
I don't have much time to write up a long-winded review, but I wanted to get this posted before I forget. As requested on the forums, I gave the first 11 chapters a read through. I was thoroughly entertained. The grammar could use a bit of cleaning, but the story carried itself well without causing any confusion. The world seems fascinating, while the characters all have decent and mostly realistic dialogue, allowing me as a reader to fall into the story easily. I did skim ahead to the R-18 chapter, but more out of my own curiosity than anything. I don't typically read novels with steamy content, but I applaud the author for taking the risk and making things seem as tasteful as they can be. Your stability of updates seems great, but I'm not one to talk - being that I tend to fluctuate my releases from once a day to even having months in-between chapters. Altogether its a fun story with a competent writer, what's not to like? =D
It like those chinese novel where the main character become op but in modern time with out all the bull**** that come it like my ceo wife and some other Work of fiction with stupid ass plot hole so thank for making this novel with those cliches even though you have some yourself it not as much although you dont have hundreds of chapter to make it so clear yet but you have potential so I'm giving You a five so you can finally get a rating
The appealing storyline and engaging characters give this story an entertaining quality that is highly enjoyable. The writing quality is surely above the average here on Webnovel and while sometimes there are minor mistakes concerning grammar (everyone makes them, it’s human,- I certainly make them as well) it is not disruptive to the reader. Overall, I believe this is a good story that shows quite some potential.