Kandpalbhaskar010
So off the bat, the highligt of this story is trully the characters. They have a lot of personality and a very amusing dynamic! They complement each other perfectly. Now the writting quality could use a bit of work, nothing that completely cripples the story as a whole, but enough to stagger at times to understand what exactly is going on. Overall, an excellent story! I hope you keep going and make it even better!
The concept of the story is cool and the exaggerations of the characters make it hilarious to watch. I totally love the funny dialogues and the way they are put. It is weird and yet nice to be in a game. I could visualise the apocalypse and all the things described in the book. I only wish that I hadn't felt overwhelmed by the sudden physical descriptions of the characters. Otherwise, the story is going great and has wonderful ideas to make it seem like the next Hunger Games. I wish you good luck, Author!
This was an enjoyable read! Some of the scenes hold solid humour, and the story seems to be developing rather quickly. The relationship between the two main characters and their home life was established quickly, which made their reactions to their circumstances further on realistic to the matter at hand. The writing could use some work. Oftentimes, it swaps from present to past tense, especially in descriptions and dialogue tags. This can be read over though, and the writing is easy to read. I like how quick the story is developing, and the system seems interesting as well. This book looks open to opportunity!
Great story. The story is about Ashton a 18 year old child and nine year old Matt a adult. Both of them lived a pretty normal life of orphans but one day everything chages just cause X wanted it to. And the inhuman game of destruction begins. Writing quality - Great, no grammar errors Story development - Doesn't let you down, I will rather say it was fast pace no time was wasted on dally-daling. Character design - On point, especially with Matt despite acting like adult we can clearly see his innocent side while being carefree Ashton shows the will to protect it. World background - It gives the me Maze Runner vibes (I don't know I might be wrong about it. only author can tell property) Should you read this novel? Of course, I will recommend it. Matt and Ashton's chemistry is on point. Though I am looking forward to Ashton's partner since I can't see Matt as someone to ship with anyone at this moment. May be my fujoshi self just need a time skip until Matt is older?
So far this is one of the better ones that I've read from this genre. I'm curious to see where the author takes the story. I like the main character, and I think the author has a good plot and so far it's been entertaining and enjoyable to read. The characters are interesting and the author does well portraying their thoughts and intentions while still hunting that more development for the future. I look forward to the rest of the story.
Reviewed up to chapter 8. The writing quality is on the rough side. The POV switches mid-scene - however, this does seem to be a trend on Webnovel in general -, the pros don't quite flow, and there are grammar errors peppered throughout. However, the writing quality improves dramatically after the first two chapters. The story is paced well. While fast, it allows time to set up the relationship between the main characters, their situation, and their initial goals before getting thrown into the plot. While the character descriptions are in "blocks" the characters themselves have personalities. Beyond some of the dialogue being on the janky side, the characters have unique voices. And I do appreciate the relationship between the leads. It's obvious they care about each other. The world has some unique qualities to it. It's obvious that the writer is well versed in a range of anime and pop culture, and that shows in the world-building. :)