seijurorin
so the story is in nice I guess but the writing quality ...your writing quality sucks... I was lost many time because I didn't know what's going on anymore ...misplaced words, strange sentences, this is not bad english ...this has a whole new level of "your english sucks" so I recommend an editor, because the way it is it's not an enjoyable read.. then ppl. can focus solly on your story (which is good).