Reviews of Transmigrated as an NTR’ed protagonist.
Transmigrated as an NTR’ed protagonist.
SailusGebel
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- Writing Quality
- Updating Stability
- Story Development
- Character Design
- world background
If you have any questions regarding the story I would try and answer them in the replies of this review. Now to the review. It's hard to assess your, own work. I won't give myself all five starts for everything and think that I'm the best. I'm not confident in my writing skill, but I hope that it's on the average level. I won't be able to update the novel frequently and write more than three chapters a week because of my work. Right now this is a hobby. The story development, characters, worldbuilding, all may be unnecessarily slow-paced or written without appropriate attention. Yet I hope that someone would find this story attractive and enjoyable. I don't need powerstones, if you want, you can spend them on a more deserving novel. I don't need hollow five-star reviews that don't describe the novel, but I would appreciate any, review, even one-star. As long as it describes what and where I should change and improve, ups and downs of this story.
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I read until chapter 19 and I can say that you don't need to be intimidated of the NTR'ed title because so far the NTR is only the background of the character before MC was transmigrated, so for anyone who wants to give a shot but is scared, you can jump head-on without fear, BUTTTT I don't recommend this novel at all. MC is more pathetic than the famous 'Japanese beta MC' hell he even makes them look good (and I thought it was impossible) Writing: 4 stars Stability: 2 stars Story Dev: 1 star Character: 0 stars World background: 3 stars = 2.2 The release rate is **** too. a waste of time.
If you guys are looking for the netori, harem and r18 stuff might have to wait till this reach 100 chaps. mc character growth is just too strange for someone that was essentially an otaku. Too much self identity crisis and mc is still stuck in thinking in the norm when he is pretty much in a ntr game. The moral thing is just getting annoying at this point, contradicting thoughts that just annoys me or most readers. This is slow paced but don't central this around just the mc since it got boring reading it. Like adding about world building and how that world works from his research in his PC would probably help the mc make solid decisions. Cause from all the chapters so far, he gets pissed most of the time like as if a stick got stuck in his ass when given some info from his "friends". The big events so far that should have boost his character growth a lot, always have a reason to revert him back to normalcy thinking. It was already annoying at the beginning but now it's 45 chapters and little changed other than his physical attributes. Especially the revenge part where he thought this plan and how he was really gonna ruin this girl and even brags about how he will do it right from those shitty "revenge" stories he read in his previous world. Instead we get something that missed that claim..... it would be better if the author never added those sentences/reference cause it just made the mc even more unbearable. it may make sense realistic wise but God dam is it an annoying/bad story telling. Nothing is really note worthy that would hook the reader because of the "slow pace" and the 2 chapters or so of r18 text are probably what 90% of the reader cared about. The slow pace is just hard to pull off and may need to really amp his character. Cause at this point, you can just skip/skim chapters and probably won't miss anything important.
Writing quality 4 Story development 3 Character design 2 Updating stability- I guess it depends but I give a 3 stars. World backround 4. I'm not really an expert in terms of reviewing works but I'm still going to give my opinion?I guess. Writing Quality is decent and readable, although there's some grammatical errors It was still fine. I like the writing style based 1st person perspective so I give 4 stars. The story development for me is pretty off that's why I just gave 3 stars in this aspect. The story is very slow paced and It makes the reader feel bored. Me personally like slow pace to catch up the details and some stuffs. But slowing the progress too match will leave the bad taste to those people reading it. I highly suggest to learn how to control the pacing, Fast , Slow and etc to assure the reader is still in the story. Character development is really not good for my opinion. At first I thought he was just a chill guy wanting peace and sort of playing video games with his friend. But after some events it was highly showed the he is the most loser , beta mc that I've ever read in my whole life. His personality is really sucks like in a bad way that it affects the readers mind. His decision is hilarious to the point I want to beat him up. I think It's okay to make him like a average person....but too much and making him like a sore loser just holding the potential of the story. At first he was bullied so he will decide to change into a new different person but still after all the things happened he just become more and more trash. He was aware the fact his friend is having *** behind his back making fool of him. I like the idea that the mc didn't care but what did he do?He played with them like a fool and it really look like stupid in my opinion. I don't want to offend the author of this story but It's been a while since I became frustated at the stupidity of a person.He can just avoid talking with that so called friends of him especially Jet, this kid is not a friend at all. He was just acting and making fun of the mc behind the back and thinking how superior he is by doing malicious things with the girls that close to him. Ps: I'm not starting argument I'm just stating what I feel about the story so far so please go easy on me and don't take it as an personal insult. Everyone has the right to do what they want to do , right what they want and I really respect the efforts of the authors sharing their thoughts and imagination
I don't really write reviews(since I don't really know how to write one )but since I like this story and I wanna let the author know that there are people who always check if there is a chapter update(i'm one of them) I'mma just write it anyways. First thing I wanna say is about the title, which majority of the people question about, which in my opinion there's really nothing you have to worry about. Ok going into the story, I think the author did a great job, for instance I really like the character development of the mc and how he writes the fight scenes(very well written in my opinion),the training and the interaction between the mc and other characters. For the chapters that I've read so far, it was good.But now I just wanna binge read the chapters where the mc takes revenge(I would really love it if the author could bring out more chapters on a daily basis but than again I don't wanna rush him for quantity over quality). So what I want to say is give this story a chance/try and you might find yourself staying till the end,(which is probably not ending anytime soon) like me. I came for the cover of the book but stayed because of the story which the author clearly had put effort into.
It is a great story. The author is not a pro, but does a great job trying to get things right. Story development is only slow because of the posting rate. World background could use a little work, but it is understandable and clear enough to give you a feeling it is there. Character development is slow but thats do to yhe chaotic nature of the character. i enjoy this book and hope it continues.
(Sorry for my English, but it's not my native language) In general it is a good novel, but there are several things that I do not like. I know it has a slow development, but it is too much. In other novels the MC would have already accepted that he is no longer in his world and that now he needs to learn a new common sense, instead of meddling in annoying matters. For this there would be a small event that would encourage him to improve, but in this novel he just takes it back, making the story heavier because it can feel repetitive. I mean, there were already several things that would have made a normal person seriously rethink whether with a normal mentality they could survive, but in this case the MC prefers to stay the same thinking that everything is going to change without him doing something. I can bear that at first he is a fearful crybaby, but that at this point he has not gotten angry one bit with the cause of everything is an idiot, honestly. I understand that he represses himself, but unless it is Gandhi, I do not understand why he does not have a bit of violent reactions to several important things and only worries about small things. These are all the complaints that I have managed to find so far, if I have more I will leave them in the comments.
Well, where to begin... It certainly won't be a novel for everyone. Both the title and the beginning may discourage many people, but I think it's worth giving the author a chance because the last chapters are really great and give hope that the novel will be really good. Personally, I like how the author presents the relationships between the characters. The relationship between MC and Violetta (definitely the best female character of the series) deserves special praise. I hope that in future chapters we will have the opportunity to see her more often. From the comments of other people I can conclude that the author presents the fight scenes very well. Personally, I usually skip half of the description, so in this matter I can only rely on the opinion of others, and they are very positive. As far as the quality of writing goes, I have no major complaints. Reading other noveles on the site, this one is certainly well above average. To sum it all up, objectively the novel deserves4 - 4.5 stars (with a lot of potential). However, I give 5 because of Violetta.
I like your story though at first i didn't like it based on reviews. it is decent story. though i feel sometimes i feel you are trying to make things too complicated at times. another problem in my opinion is your slow pace and due to which it can't be enjoyed in this webnovel chapter format. Yours is i think something to be read in bulk like after 5 or 10 chapter. Overall i like it. I think it is right balance somewhere between extremes of all wish fullfilment stuff where everyone worships mc and the other extreme where anything and everything goes wrong for mc. Yours characters also feel like people though mostly shitty though that is mostly real life things i guess. Everyone isn't a shounen character. though sometimes it goes too grimdark, i guess. Like everyone has something dark about them them. Also you should gauge your story every now and then between realistic stuff and entertainment for which most people come to read a novel. Too much wish fulment type novel get stale pretty soon but too realistic also have problem of not always being entertaining. Though best of luck. I will follow your writing.
For people who come here just as a warning don't come here expecting things to what is depicted in H E N T A I all I can say is have an open mind and read the story. Though the MC is a little pathetic at first he will change bcuz there is something called character growth. Just let the author write his story and just read it before passing judgment.
note- I am a big amateur when it comes to writing reviews. but I will still give it a try. 1. My Favorite part of this novel was the writing quality. I think that the author put a fair amount of work pleasing the readers with his writing capabilities which he absolutely did. 2. As you all may know, the story revolves around a protagonist who got transmigrated into a game that he used to play. and the bad news is that he got put into the body of a person who got NTRed which explains the title. The story revolves a lot about fighting and a lot of cuckolding (not the mc whos doing the cuckolding because he is actually the one getting cucked but ofc its part of the development of the story). one of the key factors on why the novel got such a bad rating is because of how inconsistent the updates and development were. I can clearly understand that some people are just getting mad because of how slow the story is, and that is where the inconsistency comes into role. imo, if you are going to try writing a slow-paced story, I would recommend uploading more chapters per week. 1 chapter per week is not really ideal if you want your story to be highly rated and so on. It may be because the author has some work to do irl and because it is only a hobby but it may have been a bit better to upload a bit more than once per week. (for example villain cultivator, endless path infinite cosmos etc) I actually got a bit confused about the choices of the protagonist considering that he has played the game before and why he did not make use of his knowledge. I mean, if he did not even have knowledge about the game why would we readers even need the 'useless' information? I mean should he not have a bit of an advantage so that he does not start from "scratch"? I wont really pick on the protagonists development because I actually considered the amount of chapters it has unlike those people complaining about why the protagonist is such a wuss and so on. overall it is decent and it couldve had a better, overall "look" to it if it was less slow paced but thumbsup for the author.
