Reviews of Toxic rain(old version)

Hi author here, this is my first story and my first time even trying to write like this. I am going to try to write a interesting novel with 3d characters and good plot and world building. I will be trying to post 2 to 3 times a week but if I miss any dates please bear with me as I am just a high school student, with extra obligations both at school and at home. If you have any suggestions or criticism please leave them here or in the chapter comments so I can improve thank you. Expected update schedule: 2-3 times a week

Pretty good story and I like the plot, I'm excited to learn what the inilization is try describing the surrounding areas better to, cant wait to learn how the system and everything works to!