kakigori
hey hey hey shameless self-review here but i really wanna see what happens when the amount of reviews gets to ten, so it's all in the name of science. and my dignity, apparently. While I'm here, I might as well leave a disclaimer. Volume 1 is very very very to the power of ten bajillion slowburn. It's mainly characterisation + cameos from the big bads, and Volume 2 is where things really start to kick in. If you're worried about upload schedules and broken promises, Volume 1 is already complete. I've got a stockpile of about fifty chapters (give or take) just sitting there and ready for launch. I'd launch everything in one go if I could, but it's just not a practical decision as of right now. I can understand if Volume 1 is way too slowburn for your tastes, but I'll urge you to give it a shot anyway. Because I'm that shameless. Peace...?
Hi author! I was really shocked by the longevity of your chapter, it is nice to read knowing that the author updates consistently with long chapters too! I may not give you a long review like you did to mine but I'll just give you what I think so far of your book. The grammar is pretty tense(in a good way) and the descriptions creative as well, thought I barely had an idea of what or who is the character at first (saved my the word empress) but as soon as I read some more I got to know the MC. The character seems to be dissociative due to probably some shock or anything negative that that happened to her and its great as a prologue because it hooks the reader what made her like that. The issues I noticed are some errors which you have mistyped, the Shifting of capitalization to lowercase and punctuations. I hope you would edit those and correct them, I think your book has great potential, so keep writing you're doing a good job!
It's an interesting story! After reading a few chapters, I've got the impression that you don't struggle, like most of us (no english speakers), with tenses, style or grammar. so it's nice to read it. This is your advantage over most of the authors on Webnovel ;) Your story has everything a good novel should has (interesting storyline, expressive charcters, etc.) You're doing a great job!
I think it's somewhat unfair to judge this work at this point, as it seems to me that a much bigger story is yet to unfold and that the chapters currently available are nothing but a glimpse to it. I will say that I think the writing is phenomenal, although rough around the edges. I enjoyed the descriptions thoroughly and it was very easy to tell characters apart, whether it be their style or their mannerisms of speech. The prologue was very interesting and intense, I read through it very quickly and I thought its' pacing was very good. The later part of the story was just not as much my cup of tea, but it was still very well written, and the Female Lead of this story is quite charming and easy to relate to. In general the way the characters interact with one another comes off very natural and makes the reading experience very enjoyable as it reels you in. I'm curious to see what the future holds for young Ilise.
Read a few chapters and I was kind of confused which made me re-read the whole chapters again. The storyline is good and interesting with that sort of imagination. You're absolutely good at putting your imagination into words. The characters are well developed. However, I feel like the plot is not gripping enough to keep the reader engaged. Nevertheless, you've done a good job so far.
The first few chapters look promising but something's missing, it should be either that it wasn't an attention grabber (makes the reader want to flip to the next page) or the lack of spice I don't know, but this is my opinion though so I can't be sure. That's the minus point, I love how you switch inner thoughts between a child and an ***** so smoothly, without making it confusing.
Okay, first and foremost I just want to say that this is an amazing story thus far. The chapters are long and the the writing style is very good. But, there were some mistakes, though minor, it would greatly help your readers if you could clean them, like typos, punctuation marks and capitalization. I hope you won't drop this book. More power author!