MokouFriedChicken
A very good book, overall. I've never read a romance novel before, but this story change my mind. A believable character and realistic event just put a cherry on top. Author, this is too good. Even better than the usual romance novel book that I usually buy from the book store, please continue author.
There are a minimum grammatical errors in some of the sentences but to be honest it can be hardly be noticed so the text and dialogues are fine. The way you made instructions at the start of the first chapter is nice, this way the reader can understand what the dialogue mean. Character development is fine and it improves bit by bit and the story development is starting very great so carefully change the way of your writing if you want to improve. I am impressed by how motivated and inspired you are when you write, I mean publishing 7 chapter a week, for me that's incredible but there is still one minor problem for me in my opinion is the problems with me imagining the settings. So overall, it has a lot of potential and may have a chance at being contracted, so keep on writing(. ❛ ᴗ ❛.)
5 out of 5!! When I first read the general brief history for the book, it seems like it could belong to a game or a movie. you already build up the world, its history, and even its significance. It felt so realistic and eerie when I first read the first chapter and a random guy who fixed machinery to become a hero. The beginning of the story itself make you want to know more about the reasons why the female protagonist is facing that. I look forward in reading more of your works and in all, you deserve the this rating !! O w O
I have read only 8 chapters so far. Unusual style of writing a text block. Highlighting dialogs. But the dialogs themselves are curious from the point of view of their plasticity of information transfer. The characters themselves look natural, the text is easy to read. It can be seen that the text has been reworked several times. This is not raw material, it is text with editing and proofreading. The story itself is fascinating, a lot of activity, an interesting choice of names, for some reason taken from Greek mythology. Interestingly, the author did it on purpose? or are they just names and nothing more? The text is well written, the story has great potential. It was informative to read, especially in terms of building dialogs. Thanks!
A Distinct Writing Style Paired with a Good Story to Tell. Each chapter is progressive and clear. If Inkstone wasn't so limited on writing tools, I'd say the author would definitely own the immersion aspect of readers. There is a firm grasp of writing which creates prose that touches the reader's affect. Well-structured and well-conveyed.
I read the first three chapters, I think is quite interesting, especially in the first chapter, I like how you creating suspense that draws people attention and attracts people to continue reading it. However, there's one thing that I'm not used to, you can try to write the writer's note in a form that is less confusing, and decrease the amount of writer's notes if possible, as it makes the readers getting out from the story easily (if used at the wrong moment.) Another thing the explanation thing, for example the word 'malaka'. You can insert it at the end of one paragraph instead of the end of the chapter, so readers can find the meaning easier. I guess that's all, I hope you don't mind my critical comments.
A good story!! I don't know what to say. There's nothing wrong with the grammar. Mostly because English is not my main language. At first, when I started reading this, I don't really have big impression. Mostly, because i never read this type of novel. But, after giving it some time to reading, I find this story entertaining. I didn't read to far into the story yet, but I will be sure to read it. Keep up the hard work 💪!!!!!
Okay, just wow. This story is VERY different from what I would usually read. I will try to make a review without spoiling the story itself! It is not your typical novel, but it is especially intriguing. Especially the way it is written is different. There is a few mistakes here and there, but they do not take away from the joy of reading at all. Also, the writing style is so different from what I am used to, it really keeps you focused. I just read everything today, so it is hard to say much about updates, but looking at when the chapters were posted, it seems quite good. I like the story's development. The pace is good and the story itself flows very nicely. The fact that there was an introduction to the world at the beginning was also very nice. It gave us an idea of what to expect, without having to put in a big info dump in the middle of the story. This story is definitely deserving of 4.8 stars!
The writing style is definitely top-tier. As an author myself, I struggle in WN inkstone. It has no bold, italic, and underline -- these are one of the key elements in expression and style so the writing won't look flat. The author's improvisation -- used / / ** and other symbols for the inner thoughts, effects, etc. Although some are a bit harder to read, in my opinion. However, it's a good book -- grammar-wise, text is fluid, and writing is exceptional. Added your book to my library to continue reading! <3