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I read 80 chapters and I can say this novel has a lot room for improvement. For beginning... Let's start with MC, he spent 400 years in hell... I guess it killed most of his brain cells. Zero research about 'hunter' actions before becoming one. If not plot armor, his stupidity would kill his family. Writing quality needs some editing. Some typpos here and there. Some sentences are quiete broken. WQ - 3 stars. You should consider editing your story before putting it before pay wall. None likes paying for being proof reader... SU - 4 stars. Story dev. - 3 stars. It's okay... Ruthless protagonist trying to improve his family situation and acts like wuxia protagonist killing random guy son. Blah blah blah. It could be avoided with some brains. Character design - 2 stars. It's probably weakest side of this story. Most of characters are clichΓ© or bland. World background - 4 stars. Currently it feels like default Korean novel. This rating might improve if you make things better later in story. This review is based on free chapters. Maybe, you started to put more effort after getting contracted. I will visit later... No money for spirit stones and run out of passes. I hope this story improves. Good luck.
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The number of angry 80-year-olds is much lower than the number of angry under 30-year-olds. In all theory, a 418-year-old should be a very patient person. Likewise, if you spend 400 years in "hell" and you lean on something that you don't have, and which gradually becomes a mirage, a distant memory (Like a family) you become crazy to a fairly high speed. I always thought that the novel where the goal of the mc was something passive (here "to protect his family") the novel could only be boring. Just watch all the best anime, imagine if naruto didn't want to be Hokage, if Gon (HxH) didn't want to find his father, if Songoku didn't want to fight powerful opponents, if Light didn't want to kill all the criminals... A goal is at least half of a character, if he doesn't have one then it's a half empty character. In short, let's talk more concrete, the main character could be interesting if he had the will to do something. The world is basic and nothing special. The secondary characters are at least as boring as the protagonist. the writing quality is rather good if we forget the fact that the author does not proofread. the rhythm of the chapters is good.
@ chapter 80 It;s pretty common, really. Mc stayed in hell for 400years and now he's prone to anger and beast-like and he's extremely overpowered, for some reason his experience allows him to kill around 300 people without a problem Most of the story goes like this: Someone insults Mc's family or show some killing intent > Massacre > Few dungeons to get the level required for the next battle>> Someone else wants to kill his family >>> Another massacre
Im currently about 80 chapters in and it feels like the writing quality has gone down a bit after each chapter. Writing quality - 2 -Pretty lackluster, overall "its in english" but the wording could be chosen better to create a smoother sentance. At multiple points the sentences will jar to a stop or end up be missing key words to make it flow right. Story Development - 3 -it doesnt seem like theres much of a plan at all, except "protect family. kill enemy." and whatever story is there feels patched together. Character Design - 2 -Not much to say there, typical OP MC that really is too dumb for his own good and is OP just to be OP. updating stability - 2 - none listed / week. granted there was a new update ~14hrs before posting this. Maybe it'll look up from here. World background- Legit feels like a ripoff of solo levelling meets latna: survival of a sword king. Overall i wouldnt say avoid this, but veteran readers be warned: this is a bit rough. Maybe it'll improve in the future, and if it does ill come back and edit this.
This is the first time reading a magical Realism genre...The synopsis looks quite interesting and I read the first chapters which I liked so far...I will read further chapters when I get free time...The author's writing style is well written...Definitely recommended book...Excellent work, Author! Kudos!
the grammar doesn't bother me, its more of the redundant word usage, I understand what the writer trying to do. overall, its very promising, stopped at 50, going to let it build some more before continuing to read author, if one thing I can point out, you mentioned HP and the fights seem smooth, but its hard to grasp the idea of one hit kill, when damage is suppose to be fixated, or does it only apply when they are in the dungeon maybe make a side chapter covering this information, like key notes or something thanks
seems interesting enough so far. so far it's reminding me a lot of the lucifer system novel. i haven't read far enough yet though, so i don't know if that changes and it becomes unique. as for the writing quality, the english is very bad but it's still understandable. all in all, not a bad novel, reminiscent of the lucifer system novel. has potential
Yeah it seems good so far I recommend Filler song againβ¦β¦ Gunter, why did you gunt my fries? I gunted them, and they were mine. What kind of gunt gunts his Gunter's fries, And doesn't even gunt him in the eyes? Gunter, there were tears there. If you gunted them, would you even care? Gunter, do you even love me?