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The God's Prophecy
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The God's Prophecy

Shine_Geo

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What is The God's Prophecy

The God's Prophecy is a popular web novel written by the author Shine_Geo, covering ACTION, ADVENTURE, SYSTEM, CULTIVATION, Fantasy genres. It's viewed by 7.2K readers . The novel is being serialized to 5 chapters, new chapters will be published in Webnovel with all rights reserved.

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A war broke down on earth, the war between Gods and Demons that disturbed the peace of Humans. The Gods and Demons suffered many losses within the war and so... They choose a worthy warrior or "chosen" from the human world and make them pledge their loyalty to the God or Demon. The "Chosen" fights for their side but die within their fight, a number of centuries passed and the war between Gods and Demons ended with a draw. They left earth but left "affinities" to half of the people in the world. Though the war did end, they still choose their "chosen". The Gods and Demons was not satisfied with the results of the war and thus a war have started once more. A great God mentioned 'The Prophecy... Will come... A human that surpasses a God and Demon... One day...' The prophecy told that there will be a human that will surpass a God and Demon and this human will already foretell the victor of this war.

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Shine_Geo
Shine_GeoAuthorShine_Geo

Might as well rate my own book. hehe. For me as the author, it is interesting (considering I'm the one who made it) but still have writing problems that I need to resolve.

Kiiara
KiiaraLv4Kiiara

This story has a great concept, esp with the war between God and Demon. This looks promising although there’s room for improvement in term of writing. Try to make the dialogues more realistic and natural, imagine if u were the characters, what would u say? Oh, and do break the paragraph down. The writing block is too messy. Anyway, keep up the good work, Author! Good luck! 😁✌🏻

MokouFriedChicken
MokouFriedChickenLv3MokouFriedChicken

Occassional grammatical hiccups here and there. Story is fairly decent, though dialouge could use a bit more polish. Might want to break up some of the larger paragraphs too make whoever's speaking clearer for the reader. Overall, a story with potential. Keep on writing.(^^)

Chryiss
ChryissLv5Chryiss

A lot of thoughts on this first chapter. I hope you can consider my opinions seriously without taking it personally. Writing is a learning experience, and we all are beginners at one point. Writing Quality: Below Average Update Stability: Average - I suggest updating daily for one week before decreasing the update rate in order to get sufficient traffic and content to readers in order to make them interested enough Story Development: Below Average, bordering on Poor* this is the bulk of my critiques; since it's only 1 chapter, I gave 2 as benefit of the doubt Character Design: Below Average World Background: Below Average The first few paragraphs before “Chapter 1: Chosen” in the very chapter itself sounds like a synopsis. This is not a way to start a story. Neither is an info dump. After the “Chapter 1: Chosen” and before “180 Years later…” this fight scene was not conducive to starting a start either. It was literally eight pieces of dialogue that basically said, “I don’t want to do this! But you must die! I’m sorry.” Honestly, not interesting at all, and not necessary either for you to build a foundation for your story. Just begin right at “180 years.” You can reference the Gods and Demons war at a later time and integrate it into the story in bits and parts so that it flows without being an info dump. Once again after “180 years”, a scene for running off to school from home is not necessary or interesting for the story plot. And especially since that scene was directly before the two line dialogue of “going to sleep.” That just…doesn’t make sense to me. Readers don’t care about a scene where MC yells to Mom, I’ll be late to school followed by I’m Kyousuke and two sentences about me and one sentence about the bloody war, directly followed by, now “I’m going to sleep!” You can cut this out entirely. Then the following section enclosed by three asterisks, it’s just back and forth dialogue with “you are the chosen warrior!” This scene has absolutely no background setting nor build up or explanation to how and why this scene suddenly occurred after the previous section of “going to bed.” In the next section, it can be figured out that this previous scene was a dream. But until this point, it’s very confusing, so transitions and signposts need to be worked on and improved. Even if it’s a dream, it should be clear with some kind of indication somewhere. Three asterisks is not sufficient. After this point, now the story actually beings with the MC and his friends arriving at the magic school. I’m not going to comment section by section like I did above because this all boils down to one main impression of the entire first chapter— Filler. About 90% of this chapter was unnecessary and didn’t progress the plot by very much. The only conflict was already known at the very beginning with the war of the gods and demons, but other than that, nothing else was brought up. It’s literally, MC goes to school and then realizes Kagami from his dream was real, and now he’s transferring to a magic school. This was the first chapter. This is not gripping. All of this information could have been told in one or two paragraphs as part of the background information when the MC Kyousuke, goes to this new magic school. Or, it could’ve been heavily condensed to only include the necessary parts. Much of the dialogue and mundane actions of going to school only serve to fill the space and add filler length. It serves the reader no purpose because it’s unimportant. Another option is skip straight to the pool freezing scene with a mention of forgetting one’s jacket. Concision and cutting out chunks of the story can be some of the hardest things to do for a writer. Please don’t be discouraged by this since every new writer eventually learns about this and reducing fillers. Points of Improvement to Work on: - Balance of necessary dialogue and background information as stated above. - Punctuation. You’re missing commas and even periods. Otherwise, English grammar is passable. But you do need to proofread with the amount of typos in this chapter. It’s a bit of a turn off because it suggests lack of care. - Character development. I’m honestly worried because so far, I don’t see any individuality or much personality displayed. And the short self-intro he gave that he’s average, but “they say I might be intelligent because of my high grades, great with girls but not sure of myself anymore” is contradictory. I can’t get a grasp on his character. Who is he? Has he experienced anything significant or traumatic in his life? What does he like to do? Hobbies, interests? What does he struggle with? What or who does he care about? All of these can be answered as the story progresses, but a few tidbits should’ve been included in the first chapter so that we can start visualizing this MC. In short, you have a lot to improve on. Once again I hope this review isn’t discouraging or come off as harsh. These are my honest impressions of the story, how it compares to other stories, and where I can see parts being improved. I definitely think you have the skills to make a good story. In general, I think you just need to put a little more thought into the story’s direction, plot, and characters as well as the writing with some proofreading. Hope this can help you, and keep on writing~! Good luck!

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