Mangaholic24_7
A pretty good read. Writing is quite good, as there are rarily any grammar mistakes. A bit of confusion might appear in a reader's thoughts due to some punctuation, but it's not that bad. Story might be a bit detailed in the beginning, thus boring, but it gets more interesting to read as the story develops, since different elements starts to break and expand into smaller events and introduce situations even better. Characters can be deemed flawless, as they are build very well. The author also tells when a character is acting out of character, which gives us even more details about the characters. Author took quite an interesting take on how he writes this novel. The world is explained in great detail, but what's interesting is that the mysteries of the world gets revealed step by step, bringing the reader into light of what is happening and why, in a perfect timing.
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The writing style was so good, very philosiphical. In my opinion the detailed descriptions helps the readers to be creative in imagining the scenarios throughout the story, so I loved that aspect too. Although they were a few gramnatical errors, nothing is too major that could ruin the story and it could be fix through proof reading and editting.
Okay, I'll start with the Synopsis. It causes the potential reader to answer the questions it asks. And I definitely like that opening line. It is a good start to a good story. I definitely like the diary entries to help see what the MC was thinking. But there were times that I was brought out of the story as the MC was doing things that a 9 year old wouldn't do. Also a nick-pick, there were times where the author switches between past tense and present tense. I understand why they did it, but there is a way to write the present tense in past tense to make sense. All in all, a great story that I look forward to more chapters.