Nightmare_weaver
Yuki feels real. He has flaws, loves, falls and all the complexities to make an intriguing character. While he begins as rather wimpy, watching him grow is a very satisfying read, and I urge readers to give this piece a chance. You need to read past the first chapter to where the book really starts to shine. I also really like the slive of life feeling at the very beginning, and the odd relationships Yuki has with other characters. Odd, but fun. If that makes sense?
I am still dipping my toes into the literary fiction pool, finding what works for me and what doesn’t. Turns out, this book works for me! The names of the characters sounded Japanese, and so they gave me Anime-ish vibes (Yuki, Momoko, Saki). The ambiance (how you set the settings) is good, and text is also grammar-wise. Good job! Best of luck in your writing.
People like Yuki are present in many schools and colleges. He is a daydreamer and a strange character, not able to get along with his class fellows. I have read a few chapters. After the first chapter, does he start to change. Writing quality is good, Stability of updates is good too as already 90 plus chapters have been published. The story is developing. Will come back to read more later on. Character design and world background is equally good. All the best.
I'm a new author as well, I quite like your story honestly I added you to my collection so I can finish reading when I have more time. You do a good job with just about every part of your story, that being said your updating speed is disgustingly quick lol I would tell you the same thing i was told, slow down your updates to one or two chapters a day and build up a stock, that way you can wait till you have a solid fanbase and surprise them with a mass release every now and then.
The story looks promising with its good style of writing. Grammar is good and also its narration. I can picture out the scenes through the descriptions. I can tell that the author is indeed good at the craft of writing. I can spot no mistakes in writing therefore I commend the author for that. Good luck in your endeavor!
Oh my...this story is amazing and quite fascinating. I like how the plot and storyline are written. I love the combinations of genres in this story. The character build up and world background are good. Grammar wise and structure wise....I have nothing to say. IF YOU WANT TO UNDERSTAND WHAT I AM SAYING PLEASE READ THIS NOVEL FOR YOU TO SEE. Congrats author-san for your great work. Keep the story flowing.
I can see that you're passionate about writing because this story is well crafted and not rushed. Regarding the text: it has good grammar and it's easy to understand. Regarding the story: The descriptions paint a whole picture in your mind with vivid scenes. And you are immediately introduced to the main character and shown how he is and where he starts his journey. I like how you build up the ML as a character. "The more you write, the better you become," they say, so keep at it. Well done.
Like any normal reader, I was entranced by the book cover and the title... Then I was in for a satisfying ride when I started reading the chapters, as this is a rather fresh take on fantasy from most stories I've read. The protagonist is also realistically weak, and a bit of an oddball with his vivid daydreaming and head in the cloud personality. I'm glad that he's surrounded by friends instead of being asocial lol. His reaction to the fantastical world is simply true and with the author's skills in writing... a wonderful tale is born for us to read!
Wow, I’ll say it first. Love the MC, Yuki. Though he maybe too timid for me at the beginning but guess that’s how it is for novel like this. Love Yuki cos me too, I’m a daydreamer. Can’t seem to focus and keep my head up in the cloud. So hi Yuki, you got a friend here 😂 Now onto the writing, what I really love from your story is actually your writing style. Your description of an event or an area were nicely done. It made me imagine the scenario in my head easily. Love your rich vocabulary and the smoothness of the transition in the story. The only issue is the paragraph being too dense. It lessens the tension in your story and it’s not so easy in they eyes. But yeah that’s about it I guess and some minor grammar errors which not really affecting your story. It’s still AWESOME 🥳 Keep up the good work author! May your novel appear in the trending list!
This novel is good . I like how you put the action through in it . Yuki can be some times cute and stubborn but that only makes him more realistic . I cannot point any grammer errors as i am myself a beginner . About the development of the characters you are going a good job . Keep it up . So far the novel is good . Well keep writing .