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The idea behind this story is pretty cool and the concept behind it is really good. It reminds me of those types of stories where the main character has to go through all of these challenges to improve himself. This book has a great background behind it, the worldbuilding is really good, the main character is likable, and the character development is great. I think it's a pretty good book, and I think the story will get better if the author adds more chapters and updates.
From the very start the tension in the atmosphere could be felt by the well articulated thought of character. The scenes and actions depicted by the author are quite captivating. The more I read the more I felt more engaged with the main character himself. Good potential... Looking forward to read more.
This is a really good story that can be updated more frequently, your writing is elusive yet interesting, I will be sure to continue reading it. It has a lot of potential and I hope you do it justice. It would be easier to introduce any factions or armies later so you will have more potential to come out of writer block. Just update more frequently and you'll be good to go.
Great story. I specifically liked the world background, the world process really showed the efforts behind them. Character have layers, story development so far is fine. Rather than transmigrating in one fantasy world merging many is a great idea and keep the plot from getting boring. Best of luck author great idea.
The concept of your story is fresh as the world background is quite interesting with the different countries and creatures. The sentences can be shorter as writing long sentences make it confusing.The character background is quite good but I hope more information is given as the story progresses!Overall great story:)
I feel totally different vibe in this story! It's a great idea! I never read such kind of book anywhere! Synopsis is too much attractive and it can drag anyone to the story! Plot is really going smoothly and I am really excited to see where the story ends with! KEEP IT UP dear author! I APPRECIATE YOU!
The writing quality is good. There's very little mistake that we can ignore. the development of the story is fast, but it's acceptable. I like the interaction between Kai and Skylar but, I don't really like the keeper's personality of keeping a secret. (in my opinion only) I like spoiler. It's fine if it's a mystery that we need to search for an answer. But, the keeper has an answer but she want Kai to find the long solution by searching it himself. that's not mystery but a secret that I don't like.( again I want to say, this was from my interest, opinion and bias, not from the way you write.) So far, the characters all have an interesting traits and personality, I won't say likeable, but acceptable. Kai was a person who like to stay inside his house, so he can get awkward when meeting new people. He is kind, which is good and is a person who's easy to get excited but lazy at the same time. Skyler is hard on the outside but soft in the inside. Can come off pretty rude, but has good intentions. So far, the story is going to a good direction but, I still don't like the door keeper's personality of keeping a secret even though it won't even bring any harm if she tells Kai about his ability.
Nice story. I like the thriller and paranormal activity vibe around the story. The story will be flawless but for the many grammatical errors, tense clashes and spelling mistakes. But kudos to the author for creating such a unique world and an interesting story that sparks up the readers' curiosity right off the bat! đ