Reviews of Marvel: The Homelander

I'm sorry, even though this story has a decent concept and foundation. The execution failed miserably (IMO). The MC character is like an Otaku and not in the good way. His obsession to a single person/character is really off putting. The A.I., i don't know why many author write an AI or system which calls MC babe, darling, dear, etc. Or act as lover. AI main purpose is to be helper not babysitter or lover. That's why JARVIS and FRIDAY act like a butler and secretary.

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so far it's a nice story but not really sure on the update schedule. the way you write could be better. you could do better with the inner monologue and the pov switches. some of the inner monologues are sometimes just redundant but if done better could make it sound better. the main character has a nice development so far from what I read with the availability chapters but could have had more details. so far it's a very impressive story that could actually go somewhere if done right and if not dropped. hopefully this story lasts to the point where it's amazing

This story starts out with bad grammar and continues to get worse as the chapters progres. The storyline is ill-conceived and unimaginative, and what could laughingly be called a romance is utterly ridiculous.

Eurm.... This have those cliche type of isekai with 5 wish.. I wouldn't comment much on his stupidly flaw wish just because he want to make it complicated. I know author think hard on what wish he want, but it's bad and you make it so complicated in wording that it turn flawed. (I want to have enhanced brain more than mortal human have just to learn observation haki? And then you want a tony IQ with 100x faster in learning? Can't you just... Wait, I'm complaining about the wish right? Sorry, I'm going to stop now..

It's a good start with a couple of not so common wishes. The grammar needs work though. It's mostly ok and readable but there is usually a sentence every paragraph or two that ruins the flow and downgrades this Fic for me. Maybe use grammarly if you can't find a beta or just microsoft word.

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Here's your review, you ranting artistic c*nt. So far so good but the lack of proofread lowered the reading experience. i like how you bully tony stank. looking forward for more updates and how you'll handle the chemistry between a savvy no broody bruce wayne and more serious catwoman.

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Good story but I put down a 3 star for updates....... but I enjoy the quality rather than the quantity............... hope you keep it up author.

Why was the chapters deleted? I loved this fanfic! Are you going to rewrite or continue it? If your not could you upload the chapters again so i can reread it when I’m bore…. thanks!

imagine loving someone only to let go through a world of r*pe and torture because they wouldn't be strong that way and he had so many wishes without limits yet makes himself weak this is why reincarnated novels where the mc gets wishes with no limits usually have a very shaky if not downright trash plots like this

trash

Poor execution, terrible grammar and punctuation, bland story. Do you not use Microsoft Office Word? Even that would improve the quality of your writing. Story-wise, it's too cliche and with the exact same take on the MCU we've seen in every fan-fic on this site.

The Grammar is good and mistakes few, but the sentences aren't very articulate (3/5) Story Development is poor: Massive timeskips of 3, 6 and 11 years at a time. The storyline has little to no direction and the few conflicts there are last 1 chapter at most. (2/5) The MC has no personality and the other characters act differently than movie cannon. Alternate perspectives are done poorly and the MC pulls new powers out of his ass(2/5) The story is in constant threat of being dropped because the author has lost all motivation to continue writing. The author has kept the chapters consistently long though. (3/5) The world background is a copy and paste of an established and successful cinematic universe, would have gotten 4/5 had the author not consistently screwed up the sequence of events and the ages of characters. It would also do the author well to describe the world more . (3/5) The story is bad, the authors attitude towards readers and his own work is terrible, but at least it is readable and somewhat enjoyable thus-far (as of chapter 13).

Honestly the MC is kind of a DicK. It's cute when it's Stark but it becomes annoying after a while. .................................................................................................................................................

hell yeah make more mysterious!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!