Septic_Red
Lol, I like how the author put in a disclaimer that he will make fun of dogs and cats. You can tell the humour is good from that alone, not to mention 'Luigi's Pizzaria'. Pfft. Imagine, a guy walks up to a mafiaso and shouts, "It's a me! Luigi!" Then jumps on his head and kills him. But here he doesn't eat the magic mushrooms (drugs) and prevents others from eating them. Great concept, great writing. Keep it up.
I will start from the beginning :) The cover page is original and catchy (different from what we usually see here)! The title... in general I don't like most of the titles on Webnovel, but I know that the app prevents you from adding titles that already exist, etc. so can be problematic to find it title, that will relevant to the content. Yours is GREAT! The few chapters I read are interesting, the storyline, characters, description of the background, etc... everything is in right place. You're doing great!
This has to be one of the funniest stories I've ever read on webnovel. Pure comedy gold. Some of the grammar could perhaps do with a bit of a touch up, but it all adds to the unique charm and style. Even just the most routine things the protagonist does becomes hilarious. Like when he leaves a restaurant after eating a sandwich and gets felt up by a hobo who is checking if he just ate his own balls. Or when he comes across a *** party and is disgusted because all the participants are fat and unsexy people. Or even at the very start when he moves to a new city and passes through an area where only gangsters and prostitutes live. Sorry, my review can't quite do justice to lunacy you will experience if you read this! Give it a go for a good laugh!
HI LOVELY AUTHORRR! Firstly, I can't help but mention it's easier on the readers eyes if the paragraphs are smaller. Secondly, the different dialects of the characters have been maintained wonderfully oof! Lasty, it was never a cup of my tea, (this genre) however i find myself intrigued to stay on track with this amazingly scripted piece. The time i have in my hands doesnt do justice as i reallly wanna read more hehe. WELL DONE