Could use a bit of proper grammar and deep details of the story's world.
Over all its a good storyđ¤
I feel the character of Amber should be carefully drawn as there were rough lines.
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I just love the entire story. Hope there will be more chapters coming out soon! I like the format of the story though you could add some more descriptive words to make the story better. I'm gonna wait for the next chapters to come out!! can't wait! đ