Dorododo
Unique spin on a "gamer" story. Idea has a lot a lot of potential and allows for sequels. However, the character development feels rushed. The build up to and use of the "gamer" aspect comes across as thrown if it were together at the last minute. A rewrite might be worth considering to properly make use of this great and unique idea.
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