Ayda_fork
The concept is nice, the build up is nice, so is the title cover. however, the writing quality is too low. The goods things are the author does have an idea about writing, what's going to happen and what needs to happen. Only, the words and the associations used mess up the flow. This is not a big problem. With two more edits, all the problems will be solved. My advice is - use google docs. Auto corrects grammer, is pretty nice.