Hartman
Hello everyone, Hartman here with my first original story. This story took place on a parallel time-space. So if there were any similarities between the two world, it was purely coincidental! If there were any mistake like the plot, grammar or things, you could point it out for me so I could better improve. Finally, I hope everyone enjoy the story and support it :D
Firstly the grammar is not the best. Also, there are quite a lot of stupid things going on. For example, MC fiance- WHO knows that MC will be the KING treats him like he is some nobody peasant. What the hell!? She knows he is going to be king and acts like this? Is she mentally retarded? Next thing. Further down the chapters when MC becomes a king he announces to world that he will turn his country into a superpower to the whole world, he even says he will beat the USA. What the hell what normal politician/leader would say that in front of the whole world. Is he mentally challenged maybe? Even if he wanted his country to become better then the USA he should have not declared his intentions like that. Overall this story had potential but stupidity ruined it for me.
Is the MC brain damaged? Poor guy, he was so retarded and mentally damaged that even the goddess took pity on him. A pity the system cannot cure the retardness thats affecting him. The arrogance and the stupidity that he announced to the whole world that he is gonna create a new country and surpass everyone.. Do you have an idea of what that would create? Did you think it was a good move? That the MC looked badass? There so many more examples of this that I don't even feel like mentioning, especially that f*cking annoying female lead (MC's fiancee). I even wonder he got a fiance with that personality and stupidity, he probably paid her to be his.
The story is not that bad the system is OP but **** costs a lot and the points he gets he can only get every year 0.2 for every person that knows about him the system shop mostly sells technology's and a bit of life enchantment drugs that costs a lot for now he didnt become a king only a crown prince but his grandfather has just died at the last chapter so the next chapter he should be getting some actions the novel now can go on both directions hope the author researches a bit how a kingdom works before he starts writing the next chapter also there is a palace dedicated to a harem so im not sure it will be a harem but there is a big possibility because he will be a an emperor one day also his fiancee is the tipical one who dosnt want to marry him her fsther is the duke of his kingdom so we can see that she is a stupid we can also see that mc has fallen for her do expect the mc to be blind with her to tell you the truth i would punish her but i guess that is a bad idea when her father is a duke. We disnt see any nobels yet hope there will be some evil basterds that will try to assassinate him or even want his sister hand in marriage xD
I LOVE THE STORY. ALTHOUGH STARING WAS BIT BORING, STORY DEVELOPED VERY FAST AND VERY GOOD. BUT THERE WAS A LOT OF GRAMMAR MISTAKE,LIKE 'I am about to board the throne ' INSTEAD OF ' I am about to ascend the throne'. But the story is still very good and I love it. I hope there will be more chapters.........ππππππππππππ
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Everyone is hating on Charlotte hahaha. Although you can't blame them they have aone solid argueements, but at the same time it is your story and your time you are giving to us we are not forced to read. The story I have read so far is extremely unique in comparison to other web novels I have cone across. I look forward to your future chapters and how you handle future problems cause I am pretty sure Charlotte is only one of many. "Follow your own ideals and ideas but at the same time listen to those who seek to help and further advance you" "never tread a path blind for no path is clear" By: Zertain 2019/10/18