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Let's see, a story with greek mythology, check! Good characters, check! Good premise and world also check! Good job, Author you got something good here, the only problem would be a few grammar mistakes here and there (but like I always say it does not ruin or hinder a good story and can be fixed with ease and time) so keep going Author!
The story has a lot of grammatical issues. There was some sentences that could have been worded differently for a better story flow. A few words were misspelled, and transitioning to the next scene is kind of hard to followed. But, every authors is bound to have a lot to a few writing issues. No one is spare! I have never seen an author with a grammar-free story before. With that said, my honest thought is....I'm a big mythology lover! love, love, love it! This story is right up my ally! I like how the author indicated which gods or goddesses is which, and power. But in the long-run it might be harder to remember which god and power they are.The author could make a page, listing them all or remind the reader at the end of each chapters ( this might be a bit much). Another thing is the characters. They were appearing one by one, but for those that were introduce at the beginning beside the gods, it was a bit hard to follow. I would think, for me, is that the pacing was a bit too fast. Especially, the emotional distress that Sol had when he was desperately searching for Anya. A short description about their relationship would be great in supporting his action. I feel like there's more it than just a simple teacher and student relationship. There were a few plot hole that I found to be inconsistent, but the story is still in development , so scratch that. Maybe, there's a plot twist that the author is planning on later. In overall, even thought there are grammatical issues. That could be fix, so there's no need to worry. Beside that the author is doing great! Keep up the good work!
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