EdMakuKusune
Mmm, a great story, although I hate the way what happens to the girls that u can read from the first chap (I'm a guy, but I'm more favor to girls [Im straight], I hate how they treat girls) Ahem... by the way, you need to be ready to read the book, at least you're (emotions) are not like mine (I'm always depressed when I'm thinking too much, and I can feel the emotions for real). Am... the story is good as it makes me think how the (girls) can escape from their situation. Looking forward to it, Author!
The story has potential if develop properly. Writing quality of author can be concider as good. But I must say the story isin little fast phase. Author can be more discrptive in some parts to make it more realistic. character seems strong. but need more details to get more clear picture of their actions. World background is nice. all and all this is good story given this is a first story by author. There r chance of improvement but author can get his grip on it in time. good work đ keep it up
Well, this is the review for the 1st chapter that I have read. (No further chapters are released yet) The story is fast-paced and the reasons for MC's actions aren't made clear. He says he wants to save the women so he killed the tavern owner but that isn't a good reason enough cause there are usually lotta things that play here. Like laws, societal norms, and regional culture. Now there are two possibilities 1. The setting is a dystopia,(which hasn't been made clear in the story yet) 2. The MC is ignorant of the laws and doesn't mind being a criminal which is really weird. I think the story should explain more about the setting of the world and the reasons for MC's actions