Reviews of Rise of Hyuga Neji- a fan-fiction


Rise of Hyuga Neji- a fan-fiction


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  • Story Development
  • Character Design
  • world background



He was reborn as Neji and that was very interesting, but I don't like this M.C. as there could be thousands of possible scenarios where M.C didn't have to take the cage bird seal and become a slave to the main family. Sealing the byakugan during death is not all there is to the cage bird seal as it also limits it at all times. Not to mention that main family members can just make a hand sigh and control anyone with cage bird seal. This is just slavery. I don't know about you guys but I am not going to watch a slave M.C


Neji is a character that has hell of a potential to be a MC... Powerful clan; top bloodline; least respected by clan members; elemental affinity more than 1; struggling to prove; avenge his father and many more! Yet in the main story he was just a side character. Every web novel out thr are focusing on uchiha or uzumaki and thr is even a novel about a kid from inuzaki clan! Was hoping for someone to pick bakugan. I mean it is said to rival sharingan for god sake! This story has a lot of potential! Every day my power stones goes to this novel! So author, you better complete this novel! Don't drop it!


I literally choked when I read someones review... realistic character interaction and fluidity... and no forced changes on ‘the world’ Slight spoilers, read at ur own risk. (-...-) I don’t know what kind of stories you been reading before but this story has one of the most forceful plot devices in fanfic history. The story moves so fast it’s not even fluid anymore, it’s more like a massive river traveling at the speed of sound. Literally each chapter has a large time skip of some sort, which isn’t clearly explained and every plot point is touched upon and then the next one happens. As for character interactions, literally the story is so one dimensional it’s not even funny. Almost everything that Neji ‘wants’ to happen, happens... and the dialogue follows that. Oh Neji mentions security, somehow that causes security to rise super much and somehow Hizashi is guarding Hinata. Neji says some words to the bullies of Lee, OMG Lee and Neji best friends. Oh Lee tells Guy, guy tells Kakashi, suddenly Kakashi is like yes I will train you. All these linear interactions are so forced it’s mind boggling how many people have such hi reviews... like are you people story starved or something? People are literally treating this story as if it were some master piece. Like I’m not saying the idea or concept is bad, but the execution is beyond redeemable.


first things first... good story concept.. but sadly bad execution. theree are a lot of wrong things that the author seems to not have researched and put in a lot of wrong info one of them that is irritating are the wrong names he keeps repeating like "hiraijin" the reason why its irrritating is that those little problems can be solved by just a few google searches... also the author seems to have made this fic through his memory and never really went and verified canon knowledge as i cant make heads or tails on the mechanics he is using in terms of chakra. example is that in this fic he states that hiraishin or what he types as hiraijin takes more chakra to use than the freakin summoning technique. one-the 4th used that jutsu to massacre an army earning his fame, meaning hundreds of uses its difficulty lie in sealing that not everyone can replicate but in this fic its implied that you only need chakra to master it... wtf bullsht is this two-the most important thing for gentle fist is chakra control which the author only addresses on 1 freaking chapter and seems to forget about this huge mechanic in using chakra and seems to have a different mindset when it comes to chakra as a whole in this fic im not even that big of a naruto fan, all i pointed out are things ive read because i like reading about the mechanics of different series. the author needs to research more on canon facts that are all readily available on the web the story is really good but it operates on wrong information that takes a large part of the entertainment away from it


Can this substitute for elder scrolls while it's author is gone? 🤔 Why 140 characters It's kind of annoying should I actually read the novel and write a normal review or something? Who does that?


this is just wrong.... wrong names non-canon facts that break the story wonky plot etc. so many things that makes this story bad whereas there are a lot of hidden gems and fanfics in this site that has better stories and good writing burried without votes.. its an injustice that this is in the top 100 of the power rankings what the hell is wrong with people.


I have never read a novel about someone reincarnated as Hyuga Neji or as a Byakugan bearer and I expect a great fanfiction from you, hopefully you won't drop this as many do. I guess with time he will awaken, somehow, the Tenseigan and be on par with Sasuke, Naruto and other godly characters from Naruto. He might as well become the strongest since he is now the main character. I can't wait for more chapters~ \>.</


I'm not really used to writing reviews but some people is just literally pessimistic, did'nt bother to read the story and just auto rate one star. Give the author some credits about his work dude! Good plot development, waiting for it to develop more. Good job to author tho.


Good setup, but poor inner logic and unrealistic charachters. Besides, 4.4 is waaay too high of represent the actual quality of this novel. .........................................................................................................................................


The story is very good so far. I like the new angle you have taken with Neji. The charchtar interaction is very fluid and realistic. Unlike other fanfics which brute force their changes upon the world. Overall a very enjoyable read. Thank you for the effort.


Neji's story is so sad author can you play sadness and sorrow from naruto it's a great soundtrack I hope you won't get reported and banned though ✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨ Have some sparklez?


How did it make up to top 50 ranking R the users so desperate to read a naruto fabric Their are many good naruto fanfic Just try and search


Reveal spoiler


The problem with Naruto SI is that no one outside of the mc does anything. This, for the mc is real life so it has to follow real life scenarios(not talking about chakra), there can be no plot holes, all actions should have reactions, dictator states should act like one, the monarchy should realistic ,etc . This has become real life, treat it as such. The story should adapt to the MCs ****ery is what I'm saying. Eg: Mc gets on Danzo's radar; tries to recruit once gets stopped by Hokage, Danzo doesn't do **** until MC comes to kill him easily. Shit like this isn't possible.


Ridiculous power curve.... Everyone just hands him techniques like candy. Dropped. Himgjjkkklkgddghbbbnjmnnjnnmkjhhhbbbbbhbbggggggunk.....................


Pretty much the title says it all but what it doesn't provide is a change in fate for konoha even the shinobi world with the rise of a ninja who knows his limits understands his situation and still strives for the best and help people change for the better by reducing the hatred in there heart. At least that's what i think but overall a good read


i will be waiting for more chapters as i see potential in this novel Ather47 Ather47aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa


I am a ****** man, i see naruto fanfiction and i know i will lile it. Not 5 stars 'cause there is not a lot of chapters, but this may change in the future. Good luck and good reading.


Hahaha Brother i am satisfied. Neji deserves better, we all know it and you made it happen. From this day i will give you 2 stones for every chapter. The way you write and your grammar is also above good. Keep it up please and never STOP !


Love Naruto then please read. No system, No super power. Just plain Neji who has read naruto manga. Love the flow of the novel. Especially how the curse will be lifted, loved that part. Please don't drop the novel, I think it will be very popular.