Reverse of Arcane: Excerpts

SPOILERS Excerpts from the main webnovel that's still in development, "Reverse of Arcane." This is just to test the waters and gather critiques of my writing before debuting the web novel I've been working on. I appreciate any and all constructive criticism, and I would love any compliments. Byron Phoenix and Luca must unravel the mysteries surrounding King Derrick Phoenix's comatose state. Is it the power of the fabled Storm Crown that put him to sleep, or was it a deeper conspiracy? Find out on the full release of "Reverse of Arcane." Enjoy.