Revenge Through The Broken Window

The book has an interesting plot, though I think its brilliance is overshadowed by the grammar and punctuation errors. Additionally, you need to make sure the reader knows what character you are portraying. Best way in my opinion is to separate those lengthy paragraphs into ones with either different people speaking or at least limit it to maybe 4-5 sentences. Otherwise, it’s difficult for me to give you tips on your paragraphs because of how long they are. Despite this, don’t get discouraged author ! Time and effort doesn’t cheat you. Also, if you have discord, contact me in the swap links from before, and I’ll try to help you fix those errors. Keep up the good work !