Freeya_fanfan
There is strong portrayal of emotions that did not disappoint. After seeing the title, I expected it to begin a certain way, and I just want to say that your opening definitely lived up to my expectations. However, I personally would have preferred if you began immediately with the second chapter of the prologue because the first was a bit info-dumpy (once again take everything I say with a cup of salt). Instead of shoving all the ages and descriptions of the children down my throat in a few paragraphs and listing them as if they belong in a resume, I would personally have preferred if the information was spread out a bit more evenly throughout the first few chapters, obviously giving enough detail to understand the plot. On a similar note (this is also personal preference), but using actual numbers makes me a bit less immersed in the actual writing. That being said, you have great dialogue, action, and foreshadowing. In case you were wondering, the only section I gave 4/5 was on story development for reasons stated above. Good luck!!!
Your novel is written in the style of knightly stories of the late Middle Ages, and Europe. The plot is intriguing. Reading is really interesting. Starting to read the swap review, I didn’t notice how I read all the chapters you published. This suggests that the reading was fascinating. It’s not clear why they decided to kill the family? I see no motive. And so in general it is a tragic novel, but it is easy to read. Good job! Good luck to the author!
Interesting plot. The story development seems to have a perfect pace even with seven chapters so far. There are also a lot of details that give the reader an easier time to picture what the author wants them to picture. Writing Quality is good, I have not detected any problems or errors when it comes to spelling. Keep up the good work author!!!