Shadow_Magus
Well the story is written pretty nicely. It binds the reader with story urging them to think what's next will be there in story for them. The characters bulid up is also great with their skills. Overall the apoloclyps theme is well suited too . There is not much grammatical errors which is nice again but I feel there is too much information and explanation give.You could just casually describe a character or a scene without adding additional details . No doubt story has great potential π€
I love this novel. It's an interesting story with excellent storytelling. It has the making of a story that simply yearns to satisfy your desire. It's a fun apocalypse novel with some game elements added in to make it funnier. You won't find any of that cringe about protagonists and their personality, never questioning what the MC does, he just does it. He doesn't have to explain the scientific knowledge about his actions, and if you have any questions, the author answers them in the comments. It's fun and tells the story of a guy being himself. He's just himself, not some cold guy who kills everyone for the lady kind of random cringe with lots of dark thoughts. There is not any filler like in other novels, when there an enemy we don't have to bore through several texts of how some guy fights his zombies. We get to see the outcome. Fun! Keep it succinct!
The author knows how to make his storytelling interesting! I really like reincarnation to the past novels and this story has a potential to compete with the top ranking novels in the future if given the time. Congrats in advance author! Hope you will make review on my work called Lumia: Other World.
Really fun and well written survival story. The pacing is really good, chapters just fly by really fast. The writing is very detailed, you can get a good grasp of what is going on. The overall is story is good, with the premise of a mc that has information on the situation and is using it to gain advantage in the battle being a very cool one. The magic elements sorta feel like they're just there for the sake of being there though. I feel this could just have been a zombie story with a mc that has inside information and we wouldn't lose much. Also wish we would get less narration and more dialogue at times cause the dialogue is really fun.
Alryt, nice story I must say. Your writing quality is great. You got a nice flow I give u that. But you might want to cut down your paragraphs in your second and third chapter. Cos in those chapters, you have lots of important info... So making it long, made my head ache some more with my headache. I had to focus so much or I wud av lost what the paragraph was saying. Normally a paragraph shud b btw 3-5 if I am not mistaken. Little or no typos, great book n plotline author. It shows author knows what he is doing. Added to my library, would love to see where this is going. Nice work, keep it up.
The story and the past is good and the development of the story is like a smooth water flow but have u thought that when the acloplyse started human laws will not crumble very fast and the mc behaves like when he is from the past because humanity will not crumble in a day at least it will take a week or so. In my opinion aurthor u have disturbed the flow of river when he trash talks those police officers because everyone has a self respect and will not bow down easily so thatβs the very clear that u have messed the story Sorry for the harsh words and if u read it u can read some other authors writers work and u can gain some insight. I donβt know how u good reviews thought they didnβt even pointed out simple mistakes π Even though it wasted my time typing I like your world background hence i thought I pointed these things if not readers will get disappointed and will leave the novel π
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Although Iβm not a big fan of apocalypse novels, I do like zombies and undead stuff especially necromancy eh Iβm getting off topic anyway I recommend this novel I tried it as a heck but I actually liked it so do try and give it a shot. Iβm an author myself and I know that shadow strives for improvement so if u can do help him, he will always ask for it I know that for sure.
Amazing Story, The writing style, the vivid details, the progression of the story, Everything is done excellently. Just the details and the amazing progression of the story is enough for readers to understand the efforts put into it. I don't really read apocalypse stories, but this story hooked me up. Read all the chapters and you will be amazed π
The story is very interesting and the dialogues exchange is also very good. I will definitely follow this book till it's end The plot was unique and immediately piqued my Interest. The story development was also well in pace. Not too fast nor not too slow. I could feel the author's unique writing style and I liked it.Author did a great job in describing scenarios.All in all author did a great job and looking forward to read more. I will definitely give 5/5 to encourage author and for his/her hardwork.