Umm... btw the story is good but try to make the story look like that its now gonna happens likewise in simple words i wanna say this that work on that part of your story which can create a image on the readers mind. This would make your novel more ridiculous and hence more readers would be attractive towards. By the way keep it up... Aisay hi shugul mela rakhao Shugul ka shugul kaam ka kaam Parho na bs 24 ghantay yehi kaam kartay raho crore patti ban jao gay😂😂😂😂
You may think I'm being harsh but I wanted to give the author and anyone who would like to write a story some advice. I like the plot of the story, but it could use more descriptive words about his surroundings, the people he meets and the things he is doing. I would like to see punctuation when someone is speaking as it kind of disrupts the flow of the story. I was finding it very difficult to lose myself in the world of this story as by chapter 5 I am normally drawn in. Also if you want to explain a certain word can you wait until the end of the chapter please. I will check back later. I hope you still continue with writing this story just with a few tweaks. I thinks it could be a good story.
I like the storyline of the novel and that there arent filler chapters but chapters with actual content. But i get the feeling that its more like an approximate recount of what happened in the past instead of a story that lives in the moment. Maybe its just that i prefer an other writing style though but thats what i think about it, so i rated it like that.