CrazyGuest
Above average and entertaining, but not what you may expect and not for me. I have tried picking up this novel twice and have become disinterested twice (read until zou). It is well written for a fanfic without glaring grammer issues and the story takes a unique spin on the one peice world which is not easy given how many fanfics there are for it. However the author chose to wuxia the one peice world which always felt out of place to me. i.e. new power levels like emporer realm and saint realm are totally unnecessary in a world that has a very clearly defined power structure(especially when the author chooses to use both power structures to explain eachother when one is already enough). The other reason i became disinterested is the inconsistency of the mcβs power levels and the mcβs deus ex machina abilities. One chapter he is stronger than vice admirals but weaker than admirals and can barely hold his own. Then a few chapters later he is able to hold back 3 admirals, sengoku, and Garp without and power increase? The same with his abilities, which are just introduced when the author needs them, like healing, mind manipulation, increased gravity, etc, followed by a sentence how he learned that ability long ago but didnt use it because he didnt want to or was unable to yet. He recently told his crew about increasing his abilities through exotic DNA which they should not understand at all. DNA is known as the lineage factor in one peice and is something both new and not known to common people. It is the whole premise for the vinsmoke family arc, but his crew just casually understand this because they need to for the story. Overall, i enjoyed much of this story and many will not be bothered by what i mentioned. But for me the repetative deus ex machina moments for the mc have dulled any tension or interest i had.
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An incredible work at the war arc. I applaud you author. for any new readers, this is a gem. An op mc, an interesting plot, the mc is not a wuss, it has a harem of two girls so far as supplied by the author. And so far all the characters that weren't shown in the anime enough were shown here, especially in the war arc. some attacks made by the author for those people like Garp or Kizaru were really cool.
Just Binge the whole story just 2 days and didnt sleep properly and gotta admit.. IT'S WORTH IT! How the Hell is this not in the TOP 10. This story is on PAR ( in my opinion) with the Legend himself ; Einlion-samas Endless Path story.. Author really thank you for the wonderful Journey/Adventure that you created and share it to the mass. Wish you well in this times and be safe healthy always. Ps: Are you married? Are both Ian and Elene you and your wife in the story? Sorry just askin. Just had the vibe/feeling that i felt in the story that it's you and your Wife :v .. Well i might be wrong buuuut just asking :3
The writing quality and update stability is not bad. The World background doesn't fit into One Piece (Japanese Manga) with sudden threats of World Destruction through some kind of demons called "DiΓ‘voloΓ" (sounds Spanish or italian" which is bad naming. And abilities that don't fit into one piece. Random new abilities like suddenly gravity control, healing and mind powers is also bad character design. His strength level is also inconsistent. He is stronger than most vice Admirals but weaker than the admirals. Few chapter later without training or a power boost he is stronger than the admirals. Another few chapter later still without any power boost stronger than whitebeard or at least his level...
don't get me wrong the story is good it's just that the mc keeps deceiving himself thinking that he's one of the strongest and even keeps believing that his speed is approaching son goku's light speed. at first it was confidence that backed up his words since he trained from since he was a child but then it's like his ego got the best of him cause it's not confidence anymore it's straight arrogance and gets boring when he keeps thinking he's better than almost all the people he fights. and respecting your opponent is when you give it your all or almost your all cause the mc seems to believe that by bringing your strength to the same level as your opponent that's respecting them even when he gets injured. but to that's disrespect and arrogance like didn't you master the six powers didn't you sharpen your senses then and you have experience with since he's been fighting his dad so tell why the mc forgets about the opponents tail end even sustains an injury plus he does it more than once so yeah it's better if the mc goes all out in his fights instead of raising it to his opponents level cause he's not kenpachi who just seeks fun battles
I've noticed that the author has fallen into a "writing trap". It is very common for newer authors to get caught in a trap called summarizing. Instead of reading this fan-fic like a story, the reader is forced to read a "summary" of the story. Things like details are extremely important when writing, and can help fend off the summary-like atmosphere this story gives.
Just realize I did not put a review for this book, despite it reaching 150+ chapters So in conclusion, Writing Quality-5/5 ooga booga me caveman brain can read very easily. I mean its readable and I never pay attention to grammar in the first place. Story Development-4/5 I am entertain. I mean I can't really say much, the manga isn't even finish yet. Its just really slow right now, which is very understandable as I will explain late on(or maybe to me the chapter feel very short) Character Design-4/5 The author is considerate enough to show image of how the character look. However, some oc are very flat but I dont think this will be permanent. Just like how one piece have arcs for each character for their development, I think this one will be the same. In fact currently, one of the character I consider flat will probably develop due to a factor. Updating Stability-5/5 Its very consistent, and the quality holds up for now. I don't think have preplan as he will sometime ask for our opinion that may or may not influence the story(Which I really love, tho that could be what lead to its possible downfall) Considering how oftern he update, Im really worried cos mate that pressure tho. World Background-5/5 I think this is probably his biggest strength. He stay relatively close to canon(not all the time cause u kno, butterfly) and its really intriguing but not unique. In conclusion, a very good read for me, do note, the only reason I will drop a novel is cos of shit mc, shit plot or shit romance. And for the record, my opinion is shit too.
nice story with an OP mc and the author trying to fill the blanks Oda-san left with his own so some may not like that as everyone likes different things to happen so no complaint there and the only downside to this story for me was that author went reincarnation for mc's gf and mc character is kind of bland during the first 50 or so chapter before getting better. in short good read and a well-done job for the author at least among the one piece fanfics I have read also a heads up the author likes to use wuxia style for classifying grade for strength which is not bad just some may not like it