Avi2112
Dude....before starting I would like to say that I love harem!!!! But a harem without any proper story..........not. I think that you should try to write this novel on a proper foundation i.e., Slice of life of Mc. Do you know that readers come to like an MC by seeing his daily life? They like the MC when they can understand him/her. I also want to say that I also don't like MC catching women like pokemons.
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First of all I like how the story is progressing so far and I hope you don't drop it. now the next thing is about the harem I honestly love harem and romance novels so I don't mind if you made a harem but you have to keep in mind that if you make a huge harem then the story would not go that well so keep it small or medium depends on you actually , next try to create a health relationship with the girls and not just them being dolls for sexual purpose (this would be hard but don't stress about it) , we don't mind if you did a few chapter on them also. Next superman has a lot of weakness like kryptonite ,magic, red sun etc you get it right, so try to have him build resistance against it if possible thank you [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=exp][img=fp][img=fp]
the MC is a perverted ***ist pedo. he's planning a harem as a bady and he's already grooming Lana Lang to be in it. that's just sick. he uses his x-ray eyes to perv on pretty much every female he see's. the author is too much of a DC fanboy to make any changes to the story no matter how much sense they'd make in the story. this story is just a big example of what not to do with your SI. power hungry, ***ist, pervert.
This is probably gonna get deleted but this is disgusting! The mc fondles his female best friend when they are below the age of 10, then the same night sleeps on the same bed "Hugging her from behind", he also says he cant wait to see those "cute t***" of a 12 year old, and other times he sexualises kids I want you to remember the Mc was an adult that reincarnated so hes a 18+ year old creeping on prepuberty girls
This story is quite a disappointment, if there was a harem tag i wouldn't even bothered trying to read this. Beginning was somewhat promising, but after seeing that mc just comes to Gotham to watch Bruce's parents getting killed with stupid reasoning, I already understood that this will degrade to stupid harem fanfic and will be dropped by author as usual. Then i checked when last chapter was posted and surprise(no) it was 28 days ago, then after reading few reviews i understood that my assumption was correct and it will degrade to stupid harem with hypocritical, psychopath mc. In my opinion for example even with Bruce's parent alive mc could've shaped Bruce into Batman by showing him Gotham's true colors. And seeing Bruce who is not emotionally broken by his parents murder would be interesting. But mc have dumb reasoning and by reading reviews I know that he will continue to use that reasoning, so there is no point in continuing reading this.
I overall liked your story, but there were some moments where I didn't like, but at the end, I am getting content for free, so I am in no place to complain, if possible I would like you to focus a bit more on supes mental powers but so far I am liking it. So here are some 5 stars to cheer you up and motivate you to write more good content for us.
I like this story I think it has potential. The author is taking an interesting angle on the Superman story. I often thought that Superman was to much of a do gooder their were things that he could have done that anyone would do. For example I do think Superman should have a large harem that he loves. These women would be one way to keep him grounded and less likely to turn to the Dark Side.
it was a good story though it wasn't any different from any of the other "reincarnated into DC" fanfictions I've read before. it wasn't very exciting and the whole harem aspect could've worked if MC stopped being a pervert (is it technically pedophilia if he's a kid too?) the writing was good and simple though I prefer more details so I can really experience the story (it wasn't bad though).