This is the first book I read on this platform and I could not stop reading it. The lore and backstory of the world itself is amazing not mentioning the characters amazing backstory(which hasnt been released yet when I post this, so I'm excited). The items and skills are very unique and remind me a lot of my favorite animes but less Op and more realistic and relatable. The only critique I have is the grammar and wording but I just corrected it in my head and re read if I dont get it so it's not a bug thing. 10/10 would reread again a million times.
This story has a great beginning and I can't wait for more, It makes me want to just write my own ending so I'm satisfied with an ending, but then I'll know that I want more... 😌 The only problem I have with this story are the minor grammatical errors, but otherwise this is one of the best ones yet! ♡♡♡♡
First of all, your world system is very promising. I have read many famous translated books. I found your world system quite a bit promising compared to them. There are a few areas where you can develop more if you revise. Character design, story development, and update quality are very good. There will always be some areas to develop. Every famous writer's writing also has these faults. Lastly, I will just say that your English writing is not good. You should revise your writing. There are many errors in punctuation, spelling, grammar. You can try the Grammarly app. It may be helpful to you.
With much enthusiasm and avidity, the author presents us with an engaging story. The storyline, as well as the presentation and design of the characters throughout the story, continue to be winsome. While I find that it often lacks rhythm, I am still of the opinion that it is a relaxing read, very suited for this platform. I wish you a lot of fun continuing your story .
To be completely honest, I see it as one of the 'typical' reincarnations I see on a daily basis around the webnovel platform. The story feels bland and it feels like it centers around reincarnation for the sake of being a reincarnation genre. There's nothing new except for some slightly changed concepts here and there. All I see are the same overpowered stuff, the same slimes, the same adventurer's guild, the same magic crystal, and the same concepts repeated over and over again. A good and unique world crafted with care doesn't hurt anyone, it just takes dedication and time. The protagonist feels off in a sense that she has times where she completely shifts in mood and acting out of character, giving the readers an off idea that she's not a well-built and solid character. Overall, it has potential to improve, of course. But as of right now, I can't immerse myself in the world the author is trying to make. Sorry if I came off as too picky or rude, but we need criticisms like these to help us see the limitations of our novels and improve our writing.
Your novel is pretty unique with how you make use of the system It's also pretty easy to read with only a few grammar errors by no means enough to take away from your reading experience like some other stories on here. Your battle scenes have a great feel and I absolutely adore Little Shadow! Keep up the good work.
Hello new to Webnovel and first time reading a novel just got to the second chapter...well anyways it’s been a long time since I read this kinda setting so it’s pretty nice and this is a great novel I would definitely like to read so umm I don’t know how to describe it well anyway this is great move to read this is my rating anyway toodles sorry bye
WOW!!! Did not expect this 10/10!! Went into this novel thinking it would be the same cliche stuff as in most reincarnated novels, but I am happy to say I've never been so happy to be wrong!! Well thought out characters, engaging plot, unpredictable enemies, yuri. This novel has it all. Keep up the good work author!!!