ClearSkySage
The author here doing his predictable shameless review. This book was something that was in my mind for some time, so I basically wrote it in my free time or when I could sleep, so I don't know the frequency I will be able to post chapters. It will probably become better when I finish the Mokuton Authority novel. As a WARNING: I will take some liberties with the Sharingan, IT WON'T BE CANONICALY ACCURATE. So please don't state the obvious, it's just a waste of time. ~~Thanks for reading~~
This story is just plain boring. You’re MC is simply doing nothing but occasionally getting in pointless fights (without using his superpowers) and other than that he just narrates about the plot. It’s like why are you even writing this at this point? You literally written 47 long chapters about nothing...
I just cant Mr. author. I can't read this fic even if I want to and I like how you structure your story but the dialogue man the dialogue it's killing the story for me. I can't just read a fic with a dialogue that's like "Bla Bla Bla Bla"(name of speaker here). If you rewrite your dialogue then I will give it a shot. This story doesn't deserve 5 stars from all the reviews I have seen that give it 5 stars, I don't know what the others think good fanfic and story is but with a dialogue like this fic isn't a good one. Keep up the good work Mr. author but try and read some fics and see how they do their dialogue.
Idk what to think man, the whole prologue was to make the life of the mc shit hahahaha, also in the tags appear romance, but till now like 90 chapter there was no romance at all, just drama so i think that you should change that tags for drama, tragedy or something dark, at the end the mc just suffer during the history
One of the authors that I felt as if had the most progress since the beginning of the authors Naruto story was trash ( gets better ) however the entire series goes along nicely however my only complaint is that the MC seems to lack life? I don't know how to explain it but the characters don't feel very expressive despite the end of the prologue being heart racing.
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