Reviews of Reborn in the Shinobi World as a Sarutobi
Reborn in the Shinobi World as a Sarutobi
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This story has promise but it has a ton of stuff that irritates me. First of all the vocabulary of some of the characters doesn't make sense. The Hokage is using the word totally in his vocabulary as if he is an ignorant high schooler rather than a highly learned leader of a village that is nicknamed "The Professor". I love Op Mc's which this mc is but I hate Mc's who think that they can take other characters and make them Op just because he trained them. That's not how it works. The mc has cheats that give him a huge advantage so it makes sense his speed of advancement but at age 6 all his friends can beat chuunin and have mid chuunin level chakra is ridiculous. The author also doesn't really realize how chakra intensive some techniques are. 7-8 years old can not use A or even B rank Jutsu. Kage bunshin no jutsu is restricted to jonin level ninjas because of many reasons. One is that an average jonin with a jonin level chakra and control can only use it to make 3-4 Kage bunshins and that's it. An 8-year-old kid with a chuunin level chakra and control can summon 7-8 Kage bunshins to do his moonlight style Kenjutsu. Another thing that annoys me is that the author confuses kenjutsu with taijutsu and it irritates me a lot. There are other things that irritate me but I don't want to write more.
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umm first of all the grammar is just bad i cant read it past ch3 even if im curious about your story... sorry there... hopefully you can use gramerly or other grammar checker before you post it here or update it later on.. please... because i think the premise for this story is good please tell me if it become better and what ch it start from?
Im not a writer and English is my second language but i have to say that this novel was imposible to read with the amount of typos and grammatical errors. I thought that after a few chapters the author would stop writing the same typo over and over again and again after a lot of people mentioned it in the comments but he didn’t correct the typos or stopped writing them (the typo is “has” instead of “as”).
This story seemed to be great at first but ! The writting quality is barely acceptable and more than anything the story lacks personality. The MC has no depth, no originality and is too OP in the sense that his OP pop out of nowhere and seems to be contagious, spreading everywhere. The stoty background is that of Naruto World but it is too superficial and lacks in depth research on the subject. In all it is a 2D textbook fanfic in which the reader cannot immerse themselves into. Despite the fact that the original idee was good.
The story is interesting, but there is a lack of research. For example, Hayate is four years younger than Asuma, but the writer made them the same age. Gender-bending, I can't even comprehend my hatred for it. The idea of having Sharingan abilities without the Sharingan is genius, and I applaud him/her for it! Finally, detest how the mc spent a lot of time on other characters rather than growing stronger himself. Overall, good concept, but with a poor application? Not my cup of tea, though others might like it. I suggest re-engineering the fic.
God damn the English sucks. Like it's really bad. I can't express it enough. It's comical at times how painful it is reading broken English. In addition, the autocorrect is awful as well. It's fucks up so many words and makes the verbiage absolutely horrible. Once past the broken English, however, the story is actually of great quality. The characters are great and it is a very interesting and different take on the Naruto world. It was kind of disappointing that Might Guy was changed into a girl but oh well. If you could get an editor or try to improve your English by actually proof reading what you upload, it would be so much better. Thanks for the great story!
This could have been way better if the author spent time fixing the spelling and grammar a little. Even using normal Microsoft word would have done a lot of good. Stopped reading after 15 chapter as the story went too fast, made no sense, the character went too OP and seriously could not ignore misspelled words.
