Reviews of Reborn in DC (anti-hero)
Reborn in DC (anti-hero)
Grey0814
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Your Story needs a rewrite and a lot of proof reading. Don’t get me wrong, It has some definite potential and I like the concept you’re going for, however that can only keep my attention for so long. The ungodly amount of grammar errors made it extremely difficult to follow, and quite frankly had left me extremely frustrated after every chapter. An example of this would be in Chapter 12. “After checking her state for a wield, he took the drive sit and flew the jet.” Yea...I too was blown away at the lack of proof reading, if any. At this point I would like to point out that other than grammar the story itself has major pacing issues. I feel the author is writing less for plot and more to imagine himself in his MC’s shoes. In my own words this is a “hey bro ya know what would be cool” kind of story where you are just saying what you would do with no detail on the effort or practical ways of going about doing it. Overall if this was rewritten I would maybe continue but for now I have to take a step back from this novel. This is in no way meant to disrespect or hate, but to offer constructive feedback! — M.C_Darwin
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It's getting really on my nerves how the wife of the mc always is more powerful than him he is also always getting nerfed and just a weak little ***** otherwise great fan fiction like really is that his reincarnation story or the adventures of his op wife while he'll stay at home looking after the kids like come on mate you had a great idea but really ****ed it up
I was not impressed with this story. aside from grammatical errors which I won't go over there is a real lack of true character building right out the gate you go through several time skips only stopping to cover something unimportant or just add in some marvel concept like Jarvis or danger room. Then there is the poorly chosen wishes that steals ideas from various fiction with no originality or creativity except the last one which was just pathetic and proves that there was no intention to develop characters and their relationships its much easier just to magic those in. Characters are killed off but doesn't matter cause they were personality equivalents to white noise. truth is this story could maybe be good all it needs to do is get a new name, start over, be creative this time, and slow down developing the characters in a meaningful way, oh and to figuratively burn this one so readers arnt tarnished with its presence.
everything was just terrible. the only wishes that made sense were 1) tony stark intelligents 2)creation quirk from momo after that basic common sense is non existent at this point. I don't even want explain the other messed up things about this novel cause it's really even comedy novels they some sense but this.
their are many problems with this fanfic one of the most important being the fact that the story honestly doesn't even need Gina if anything she gets in the way of the mc completely harnessing the capabilities having a brain like tony stark I mean he literally made time travel possible and that is not even in the list of top 20 things hes done with his incredibly powerful brain.
Bad grammar, cant sau anything about stability of updating because i gave up on the first chapter so i will give full stars, story dev. is a mehh, charater is good and world is good. Overall, pls improve on the grammar, its a major point when writing anything, even if you are not native english speaker surely you could do this better if you just write the chapters in word and copy them to webnovel.
te voy a dar un incentivo para que progreses, te recomiendo que no lo hagas demasiado poderoso al protagonista desde el principio, aparte piensa muy bien como vas a diseñar tu novela para que no muera en unos capítulos o te aburras por hacerlo demasiado fuerte. ------------------------------------------ i wish you good luck, dont make the mc too overpowered and think your novel twice before write after all its your "baby" xD