Reviews of Re: Akimichi
Re: Akimichi
Don_Paw
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SO far this is amazing and its unique [the 2 akamichi SI FF].....so far not much but interesting.......its cool MC dont have the SI knowledge...... suggestion: keep MC OP [he was a champion] dont neuter him....keep him OP .....give some BS powwa...ie: wood style?,....or sage mode [natural..not animal ****]....dont make him an idiot...keep him cool and smart..............also add some romance and fluff.....just build it.......if harem keep it small....just saying....maybe save karin and tatuya [tatuya,,, I think was sold as a slave by her parents when she was a kid....MC could save her?]............really want to see an akamichi FF where MC just fucks up all the other super powers.....screw teams and ****,,,,,,,,,,,,anyway....GL
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I get that you want to try to look for something funny to add to the story but what’s with him getting depressed about not being fat he should be happy that he’s becoming stronger faster and you should really do something about that because it’s getting really ridiculous that he keeps getting upset at not being fat but he can still use all of of his techniques that needed fat so there’s no downside why are you upset that you’re not fat
Re:Akamachi is a fairly enjoyable fanfic with a premise I really like. However, the work could really use editing. There are numerous grammatical errors in each chapter, which significantly detracts from the reading experience. Furthermore, the work as a whole could use some editing. There are sections that are basically exposition or filler and could be cut and integrated more naturally into the storyline. I did enjoy this novel, but I dropped it at chapter 13 largely due to the lacking editing.
Pretty great just needs more stable development and progress at a steadier pace within the storyline. The focus on character development is moving along fairly well but it has some flaws within the complexity of the protagonist or main character based from how their decisions are based and made along with reactions and vocalization of their personalities.
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Idea of story? 5/5 Legit it was an actually banger of a change of PoV base off of close Canon. Small changes here and there, not much of a biggie in my opinion. Writing and development overall was great up to Volume 2. Even some small hints of new characters off to the side. Either allies and/or enemies. Nice spin to it, but Volume 3... I have to say sadly that I did not know what was going on. Base on what I read so far... side missions (filler stuff???), the 2 year skip canon, Gaara Arc (???), and some side arc (I assume movie related stuff). It felt... "all over the place" if you know what I mean. Not being to harsh because comparing that volume to the previous 2... he had a good run overall. BUT of course there was a comment left by the Author with one of the comments. "Personal stuff happening" and so it can't be help. I won't fault the Author due to trying to continue his story. Things happen and it is understandable. It is quite sad to see this go, but I will say this was a nice refreshing read. V1 up to V2 4.3/5 for personal rating. I liked it quite much. Sad to see this go, but there could always be a continuator in the future or a similar adapt of idea which of course there are plenty out there. This one takes my cake cuz... it is Akimichi Choji HAHAHA. I really did quite like the character in this novel's presentation of it. Yes some thing could be a little bit better, but those little "matters" are small. It was fun to read in the end. Hope you are doing fine Author! Stay healthy 😉
