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Thank you guys for the support, don't mind my rating, just following Master Bai's way. Please if you're going to review be fair and just. Also please note this is an original novel and the author is not getting paid to write in here. Translated works have an update schedule. Updating this novel is based on my free time. For any question, please comment down and I'll try to answer them. Thank you once again for giving this novel a chance.
**Review from Chapters 1 to 4** This is a story about Ririna who fell in love with the powerful CEO Eli because he saved her from the orphanage. She followed him everywhere as he trained Ririna into an assassin and one of his woman who warms his bed. Years passed, our Ririna got pregnant and felt that it's dangerous for her and her baby to continue this kind of bloody life and unrequited love(?) with Eli so she left him. This novel has potential, albeit clichΓ©. As of now, I only have two problems I want to point out: (1) There's a lot of text blocks that makes it harder to read, and (2) It's more of "telling" rather than "showing." Other than that, I'm looking forward to the developments and improvements of the author. Good luck! - 8
To be honest I was a bit skeptical of all those original novels on qidian recently... But hell this one is good so far.. The chemistry of both the male and female lead is amazing ..the female lead ain't a ninny or those dumb irritating one and that's a huge plus for me... The plot of the novel becomes interesting once you reach the 4 or 5 chapters that you don't feel like putting it down making you hungry for more... Imagine the male lead like Yun Xiao but much more passionate,fiery and possessive hehe...give it try you'll love it
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This story is just way too good and I must thank the author and their team for making such an excellent story. Just from the psychology and the characters and their backgrounds as well as each point of view, the overall writing is pleasant to read! The amount of updates may not be much but the beautiful and wonderful yet tense suspense keeps me impressed as I impatiently wait for more to come out. The only suggestion I could make is to get more editors or proofreaders so that the updates could come out very polished and hopefully more often! Thanks and this has been yours truly, The Servant Shrub
"He yawned and stretches his arms in the air. " I think this line at the start of Chapter 47 was the figurative straw that broke the camel's back. Please, PLEASE decide if you're telling this story in past or present tense, because it's been painful as hell reading up to this point. The plot and characters are good, can even be great depending on where the story goes from where I've read. But you NEED to choose a tense (preferably past tense) and stick to it. If your editor hasn't pointed this out to you before, or if your editor is the reason for the changing tenses, you need to fire your editor. And if you don't have an editor, please please for all that is holy stop letting the awkward reading spoil something that can be really good and GET A GOOD EDITOR.
She ran away because he showed no sign of love towards her.She was his. But, he didn't care.Now with a new career and a child to care for she was ready for anything. Or so she thought.He wondered where she went and why. He loved her but, he had never shown it. Now watch as the two entangle themselves to find out the truth of their feelings . And the actions of a pint sized master seeking to make a true family for him his mother and father
Kudos to a kababayan who is an eloquent & creative writer. One who has a knack for developing a great storyline with interesting plots & character development in your novels. Started reading LMD & discovered this novel. I love the emotional maturity shown in your character development both in the leads & side characters. Especially in ** novel, one gets to read not only the romance development of the leads but other side characters as well (two more sidestories if am not mistaken: sara & and looking forward to reading a blooming romance between L & A. Honestly, I find ** more interesting & better read than LMD although LMD has more humorous banterings & bone ticking encounters between the leads. ** is more sombre & serious in it's romance development. However, both novels are a good read & show more realistic emotional encounters compared to most "Chinese" novels I read. I hope the author focuses on finishing each novel instead of simultaneously writing several novels. Am guessing that author is waiting for feedback from readers before deciding if she should finish writing the story or not. However, I would highly suggest to the author from the 2 novels LMD & ** & the synopsis I read on another novel of yours, you really have a talent in writing. I hope after you finish LMD you will make time to finish ** & I support your plan sequel on Skyler & his adventures or misadventures & romance as well. Trust in your God Given talent. From the many reviews you have, you have many fans but all have one complaint. No new updates on ** and beware that your fans will lose interest in your projects if no new & frequent updates on your novels. I, myself hesitated to read your other novels which you have posted because I can see that you have several ongoing novels & wouldn't want to get stuck & disappointed & wondering if you're going to finish writing it or not. BTW, hope you get a better editor because your storyline & story telling skills are good but your writing needs better editor for those grammars/vocabularies & rewriting of sentences to make your ideas come across better to the readers. Wish I could help (for the right price aka arrangements) π€