Enryuu_Zahard
Sorry author I tried but I still not about to find it up to my rate maybe due to slow pace or how lack of maturity and lack of a little coldness . Not even able to use single power. Come in one piece world but banned from devil fruit. And one thing is on my mind , what is with I want to teach other mystic arts , why not make it public man. Exp. I don't know much , but you could v think like in ( ( dragon marked war god ) a novel what will happen if Jiang Chen think let me give my friends it outsiders or anybody my dragon good secret technique . I believe story will be ruined if it have gotten that way You could give him strong companion but in a different way At least not my giving away his speciality It's like u have a system but everybody can use Of course as long as you want. So sorry. I don't like the direction and motive of the novel. But ya you r working hard So good work and good luck . Hope on future to would release new one again. And I will leave a good comment on this web novel and on my mind too. Right now in my country it's night So good 🌃 night. 😎😎😎😀😉😉😉
Story is good but I don't like it Mc mystic art + eternal haki can be learnt by other At this listening I decided I m dropping Then. The power of dijiins he get is there power is not his own If they died or refuse to help or something else you finished So growth ways this novel can't go much far. So I m finally dropping But still that for giving you time v and writing Bye
while the story is great it seems a extremely rushed to have him kill a noble (who normally would never appear anywhere far from where they live simply due to how many enemies they have and their own disdain for common people) so soon while he is so weak (and young since he not only does not have a ship he does not know how to sail nor is he ready to adventure on the sea yet since his combat ability is only around elite soldier (current location) common soldier (grandline) ...due to this i will be dropping this story since i can only see a cliche plot of running being hunted and running some more where he has a massive bounty on his head and even being hunted by any and every wannabe bounty hunter and marine that is in the area he is at...while the mixture of magi was done well and was an enjoyable twist but the combat leave much cringing shouting out skill names when it really is not needed lets everyone know you are attacking with some unique move and no matter how dumb a marine is when guarding a noble most of them would be grandline marines so even the common ones would be as strong as him(most elites even knowing how to utilize shave) and would react to his shout not stand their like fools since the elites would be the ones closest to that noble with at least a rear admiral being a few steps from the noble thus killing the noble at his current power would not be possible after all observation haki users are a must when guarding someone important let alone a noble.
Personally, I like this story. The crossover between Magi and One Piece sounds nice. The only reason why I give rate 4/5 is due to I can't really into the story. The story pace is fast, which I find it quite hard to follow the development (or maybe it just me). The other reason is, yeah, the lack of update. I don't know how it was before, but when I read this, it's been a year since the story updated. So I guess, it won't gonna update anymore.
This is very good and also your effort to mix two or more anime is great but I personally think that sticking to one till the story is a little developed is good (or at least till MC becomes OP) because at that point u can take the story in many different ways It's just a suggestion anyway till now the story is very good ( both one piece & magi)
I'm giving this rating based on the fact that you aren't rushing the story he's not immediately gaining power and has to train which gives time to build character and see weakness and powerless in them so when I read it I feel as if I'm on thin ice thinking something could possibly happen to his family and such, keep up the good work I'll be rooting for you👌
Was great read just waiting on updates are a killer i did like how you are combining the aspects of both anime that can't be easy to do hopefully you will update soon would love to see where story goes definitely look forward to him making crew members household members want to see how you power up his crew and himself
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