sharrnister
I think the description in this story is better than most of the works that I have read. The writing could use some work at times, but it's solid overall. The story does a good job of getting readers' attention quickly and steadily building up tension. It is action-packed, especially as the story progresses.
I think this book has potential to become exceedingly popular ! The characters are intriguing with the mystery of their origins. Plus, this deity system is worth noting, which I believe is your selling point, as it is what makes your novel different for me. The only thing that throws me from immersing myself fully is the grammar: run-on sentences, wrong grammar tense, and a few strange parts that I would find confusing. I tried to point some out to you, but do know I wasn’t able to recorrect everything. If you have discord, I could probably dm you there and clarify myself since it is a bit difficult to correct stuff in the app. Reason I didn’t give world background 5 stars was because I was momentarily on the wrong track of thought when I read So Eun’s point of view. Maybe I still am, which is another thing that prevents me from immersing fully. However, author, don’t get discouraged ! I’ve seen plenty of stories, and your potential is worth reading ! Don’t stop improving !
Great premise. Story has potential and I'm excited about it. I just noticed that there's change of POV in the middle. I would suggest to stick to only one throughout. Also be careful of tense changes. Those are just minor findings that could still be improved. Content is already good. All the best, author. 👍
I absolutely loved the plot! At first, I don't understand it because the words were really difficult but that's a good sign, to be honest. You built the plot well and I think it could go well throughout the entire novel. I loved how every character developed as well! Good job and keep up the good work!
hey just caught up with your novel. been busy the past few days XD. Anyway, I love the way it gives of an intriguing atmosphere that makes me want to flip the pages more and that Han Min guy is something! I'm not a fan of BL so it kinda took me a lot of courage to read it but what can you say, interesting reads draw readers! So keep it up! 👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
I just recently bumped and read this story and I say this is kind of underrated with bigger potential. Well written and deserve to get a full five star! If you are looking for a story with fantasy-action vibes, don't hesitate and start reading this now. I like this story hope that the author won't just drop it like the others. The more I read it, the more I want to finish it. Hope the author constantly update its chapter. ❤️