Acylith
Author here to provide more insight: The story is centered around a dark-thriller theme based in a fantasy world. As a style of mine, I like to put many, but not too much foreshadows and clues in the story, so if you’re interested in analysing and theorising how a story will go, this one would be for you. Thank you and enjoy!
I'm good with the stability of updates, character design, and world background. Writing quality is good but there are some mishaps here and there. Example: - Singular instead of plural: There are two characters in a sentence. At some point you use "Who's" instead or "who are" - Overuse of strong adjectives: Dash and darted in the same sentence only separated by four or five words. It can exist, but in that particular sentence it didn't match and was confusing. Story development: That's a personal issue. It's just too slow for me. However, overall, I think it's a fine novel.
The use of language is nice – quite polished and well edited. Adding the good job done with descriptions, it is pretty easy for a reader to imagine what is happening there, behind these symbols. Interesting and intriguing start, and I like these clues and foreshadowing things. It’s nice when your theories come out to be right, or sometimes completely wrong, but gives you a feeling like “Oh my god how could I miss that?” Anyway, good job and Keep it up!
The language was very clean and I can tell the author did a lot of editing. Or maybe they are just an awesome author! The plot was unique as well as the characters. After reading the synopsis, I thought I was able to predict what the situation was with the boy under the ground, Rian. But I was off by a little. Can't wait to see how this story turns out!
Although I haven't read much, I have to say, author-sans writing immediately absorbs you into the already intriguing story. I can't wait to see how the story develops and how the author will further refine his/her talent. I mean just read the first paragraph if you're still hesitating, you won't regret it :)
I love how you portray your writing! The writing is neat which has been my top priority whenever I start reading books as the messy ones would kind of distract me from my attention You just have six chapters so far so I couldn't comment much on the storyline. Nevertheless, don't give up and keep writing!
This was such a joy to read. I breezed passed the 3 chapters wanting to know, what was going to happen. The plot seems very interesting so far. I love the depth of atmosphere, and show of personality in the characters! The authour has done such a good job describing everything that it is so easy to read through. I'm very excited to see whats next!
I don't give out five stars to just anybody. but this novel deserves six to be honest. I'm not good at reviews but I have to say the writing quality is that of a professional; I almost felt as if I was reading a novel published by someone already famous. the story itself is excellent, with small things here and there to add to the mystery. the characters I already fell in love with the minute I met them. as I read this story, I really felt like I was there, making them more life like. so if you're looking for a book with an author that knows what their doing, look no further. please, please, please, please, please, please, PLEASE, give this novel a chance. you'll be hooked by chapter one.
Fascinating, the story combines both magic and reality which gives it a special feel to it. The Talent and the part about the family warding off evil also makes readers want to know more about what the family is truly capable of. The slightly dark vibe given off in the story also makes it quite unique. Really looking forward to the next chapter every time.
REVIEW Narration: Decent and immersive Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed Character development: Nice and steady Character design: Outstanding Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike Pacing: Not fast nor too slow Writing quality: Magnificent Execution of the Genre: Good pitch Story potential: High Updating Stability: Steady MESSAGE I am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean) 😉