BlueLightToTheWest
Hi, I am pretending I'm the OP system. Please be aware of weaklings in this story. If the character isn't constantly beating people above his level, he is not my main character. He will become so strong the gods will scratch their heads. "I made him," one might say. And then they will fight over him. This is all really unrealistic, and not cannon. However, I am OP! I might make the author write it! Actually... Sorry, author...
Just because the main character is overpowered is no reason to gloss over the moments that make the main character relatable, since the main character is so OP. Instead of focusing on increasing the main characters abilities, flesh out who he is as a person and where he stands in the world. Have the main character reflect on what he has done instead of needlessly slaughtering to get what he wants. Epic moments need to be deserved, not thrown in for the sake of the act alone.
This is one of those rare occasions where I can appreciate both the story AND the author! The story itself was fairly linear to start, but that quickly changed... Why did it change? I'm glad you asked! BlueLighttotheWest genuinely cares about the readers and listens to the comments. He also responds to the comments which is a nice change of pace! Thanks to this ****** fact, a good stort became a great one! So for those of you who are judging this novel by the first bit of the story, please take me at my word and trust that this story gets better and better as it goes on. So then, the by the numbers review: -Writing Quality: 4/5. For those of you doubting this, just keep reading. Our author is growing along with our MC! -Stability of Updates: 4/5. Life happens and we're only human. Sh*t happens! When life doesn't give the author flu-shaped lemons, the chapters keep pouring in! -Story Development: 5/5. I gave a 5 for two reasons; the first being the exceedingly fast pace at which the MC and story escalates, as well as the fact that BlueLighttotheWest listens and has enhanced the plot as he learns more about writing this sort of novel and it continues to grow magnificently! -Character Design: 5/5. This one should be obvious to the actual readers, but for those who haven't had the chance yet, our MC is unique and has great depth, not to mention the potential for so much development! He literally starts as a baby! The only way to go is up! -World Background: 4/5. The missing star is only the fauly of this type of story. The world changes very quickly and there is little time to stop and smell the roses, so to speak. Otherwise, the imagery is well done and the universe is pretty well organized. So overall, 4/5 stars. Though to be honest, the story is only increasing in readability. There was one moment where I started to feel the story was about to go downhill. Immediately after having that thought, there was an shift in the environment which immediately brought me back in. For those that felt this review was too long and didn't read it and just skipped to the end etc... Read this. It's great. :)
My brain cells are f*cking dying. The grammar errors, the plot, the mc, everything in this novel can cause brain cancer. I can understand the general plot but sometimes you won't understand what's happening in between. We have a 4 yo mc which for me really killed off everything. The story is kinda stupid, it's like it's been written by a 10 yo and cmon what on the actual f*ck is boomx300000. "Best sfx ever." Bloody hell the harem members are dumb especially the girl with the eat me I'll kill u system. I don't know what's wrong but she really pisses me off. The fights are OK the power ups are OK but overall I lost my mental capacity to think. And in all honesty reading this is like a hate-f*ucking session almost like r*pe. I am warning future readers, if you want a serious story gtfo of here cause this ain't for u. Well that's all I have to say and I'm really sorry dear author I just really need to vent my frustrations hope you understand that we have different views and opinions but still thank you for making this story possible.
So first of beware that this novel isn't too serious a novel. So if that is what you're looking for I would reccomend you to look for something else. Now that we are past that the writing is of good quality besides a few typos here and there I can't seem to find much errors in it. The mc's character isn't all too deep, but I feel the author is trying his best and besides it is hard to make a deep and relatable mc in novels like this. World seems interesting with stones that allow for people to reincarnate and how the tribulations are decided be a bunch of scummy immortals. Updates are pretty stable and good in amount, the only time there where no updates was when the author was moving out so props for that. Yeah I guess that's about it all in all its worth a shot.
Just wanted to thank everyone for joining me in this book, and also, at the same time, give myself one more 5 star review.... It was fun, and all my readers were a blast... Hope you'll continue reading this new authors work.... this was a three month journey, and every chapter was extremely enjoyable... Hope you'll enjoy the read if you're still reading it.... *sad author waves
Holy **** dude can you fking explain anything????? Like wtf is happening in this goddamn world? Too confusing but it had potential... truly a pity since the author is obviously inexperienced and getting criticized, but he handled it pretty well by rewriting the chapters, but it still doesnโt make any sense
I like overpowered. But this is... boring. Imagine a machine gun against some sheep. So interesting is this story. If there would happen something interesting, I would read it anyway, but the not just the action, even the story is boring. Do yourself a favor and skip this. Too bad, the title sounded like just my thing :-(