25 Let's call it an overview of the whole thing...

Hey fellas, it's An_Imperfectionist here... I just wanted to talk about some issues and stuff about the story.

Here's what happened- So far, only two readers have taken the time and effort to write a detailed review for the novel, and I'd like to take this opportunity to thank them for this. They mentioned some issues with the story, and they made sense. I think many people would have the same doubts and problems.

Let me just copy-paste my reply to them.

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*THE FIRST ONE*

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Character design:-

*Argus.*

Before everything went to hell, Argus was a proper young master, The Eldest of The Great Hale Family. But, let's say... Reality happened, and he lost himself.

So, what Argus now is a complicated mixture of a proper young master and a dreamy shut-in who has been so for the last 5 years.

He is dorky, sassy, free-spirited, easily influenced, smart, and inexperienced. His last five years of depression after a whole life of... well let's say 'swag?' have in a sense messed his mind up or his thought process in a rather complicated way.

But he is always willing to learn... even when proven wrong. He feels no shame in accepting his mistakes and is shown to learn from them. This was SHOWN in "Chapter 11: Consequences"

I believe in "Showing not Telling" so I never 'told' this in a paragraph.

I tried to do the same with Lili.

The exact sentence was, "Lilli also needs to be a bit more real, we all know that she had betrayed people before so making friends with someone because of a similar past is expected but you need to highlight the points due to which she trusts the Mc, he hasn't really done much for her rather she is the one taking care of him."

And you're right... Maybe I was not clear enough. I tried to explain her reasons, using dialogs rather than paragraphs.

And there's a whole chapter dedicated to explaining the emotional reasons, {Chapter 13: Lily}

Let's take instances or facts...

Argus was shown to have messed her already messy relations with her Familia when he tried to 'save' her from the Raccoon-Guy...

And Lili knows that he can 'Teleport', something no one in the whole city can.

Lili was also very subtly hinted to have figured that, I'd be stupid to let go of a future 'Rising star'.

In {Chapter 15: FBI! Open Up!} Argus even mention in a dialogue, "Maybe the only reason you're still here is that I'm your safest course of action."

And in {Chapter 14: My boy is dumb... but not that dumb.}, the plan Argus came up with allowed Lili a new leash on life.

With these in mind... let me break it down.

So, the logical mind of Lili had established...

* Argus has insane potential.

*His magic alone can get him inside any Familia in the city... and on a pedestal.

*With the first 2 points in mind, Lili sticking with him will guarantee her safety and very possible success... if not of today's then tomorrow's.

And somewhere between these obvious reasoning which I hinted at or showed during dialogs, Lili had begun to actually care and worry about him. For the simple reason that Argus somewhat already knew why Lili was with him yet he still treated her with sincerity, trust, and respect.

He never looked at her with condescension like everyone else, despite knowing her past and what kind of person she is.

Why he did it? It's because he desperately wanted a friend... He had already considered a friend.

~And he got a friend in her~

Lili took really drastic actions in {Chapter 23}, all because she couldn't see him getting hurt.

I tried to hint at all this... but I guess I wasn't clear enough.

I'll keep that in from now on.

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STORY DEVELOPMENT:

"I don't have a problem with the plot just get rid of Mc's rashness as soon as possible."

His rashness is a problem. A problem which will get better by the end of 1st volume.

That's where the real story will begin~

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*THE SECOND ONE*

-HOW HATEFUL ARGUS IS AS AN PROTAGONIST.

Yes, he is hateful... This Fic is basically a practice run, or say a test for an original I have in mind.

If I can make such a hateful guy, lovable through sheer character development and story progression, and make it sell... Then I guess I'm more than qualified to write a decent original.

-As for Argus(MC) himself

I used the initial chapters and half of the first arc (Lili's Arc) to establish him as solidly and clearly as I can.

To let the readers understand what kind of person they're reading about... before the actual story begins.

I figured only then the character arcs will make sense.

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- Not detailing the basic workings of the system of the world.

I'm planning on doing this as the story progresses.

The reason is that... The anime described very little about the world of DanMachi itself... specially Falna or the Blessing of the Gods.

Basically, there are too many factors to mention even in a 'Major Info Dump' about just the working and logic on which the Falna runs. And I'm not even including the other stuff.

The world will... let's say, will get unlocked after the Lili's Arc.

But, not doing so is a fair point nonetheless.

But, hey... I'm just a newbie. So cut me some slack.

-Update stability.

Well, things haven't been stable so far and I'm doing my best to get it together.

I have 6 hours of college classes daily, plus 2 hours of tuition, plus an hour of self-study. And I also just so happen to have a life... at least I think I do.

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-What to expect from Argus's story?

Well, the latest chapter was {Chapter 24} and Lili's arc will end in a couple of next chapters... This is where you'll get to see Argus taking first real actions. I'll do my best to make them as satisfying as possible.

This is also where the actual story will begin... because I would've established Argus by then.

That's all i wanted to say... Have a nice day! Or night. XD