Reviews of One Piece : Raijin

MC wastes his time in a kitchen making money he doesn't need.... backstory makes his granddad seem like a retarded fk who caused the deaths of many people... turns out Mc is a retarded fk just like his granddad even tho he got reincarnated with cheats

Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing Very confusing

the hell is this?! read up to chapter 12 to see if there will be improvements in the grammar but it just keeps getting worst!! the hell is this?! read up to chapter 12 to see if there will be improvements in the grammar but it just keeps getting worst!! the hell is this?! read up to chapter 12 to see if there will be improvements in the grammar but it just keeps getting worst!!

Got no clue what i read here, too jumbled up for me to read more. _------------------------------------------------------------------------_

Didn't like it ____________-_-_-__-&-&-&-&-&-&--7&^^^-6*6&8&7///*&7\)+4_*)*&*^7>>>>7/7&7&7&/&/77/-8^6>^^&&&8&&=&/8&&&878-9&9&&&**___^^^5,&#^@"&8&8&@&&#&@886888887-466667

THE FUCK IS THIS SHIT!!!! I just read it to 8 chapter and i'm already sick of it. Bad grammar, confusing names, confusing plot. Overall this is very bad, sorry if you feel bad about it. IMPROVE YOUR GRAMMAR FOR GOD'S SAKE

Story was pretty good until mc’s girlfriend was introduced to the story, it’s like the mc became the side character and Rita, his girlfriend became the new main character, from what I just said you can decide to read it or not

i had read some chapter regarding this fanfic the author is good at writing out his imagination there is some mistake here and there like trying to make it funny but fail etc. for background story the author does not research enough background story of the fanfic you are writing

The concept is interesting. Jack dies and is reborn in the body of enel 17 years before he's defeated by luffy. Furthermore, Enels backstory is quite mysterious and unknown in the canon, which makes Enel the perfect mc as the author can create his own backstory and develo his fanfiction world. However the grammatical errors are making it hard to read and be immersed in the story. You barely understand what's happening and can barely differentiate between characters. And there's often sudden changes is the story which is not explained. For example, in chapter five author just writes "Enels name is going to be Jack from now on" and from there on everyone he knew beforehand suddenly calls him Jack which really takes from the experience of reading the story. As I said before, the story is interesting and it is worth a try as you might get more out of this novel than me. Do mind that I'm only on chapter five as I write this comment, so the author might get much better as the chapters go. If I continue to read and find the novel to become better I'll give it a new rating and review. :)

at the beginning your grammar is really bad. and the MC has 3 or 4 names in the first chapters. and after this Rita comes everything is absolutly confusing and without any sense

------------------‐----------‐--------------------------------------‐----------‐--------------------------------------‐----------‐--------------------------------------‐----------‐--------------------

Muy bueno()()()()()()()()))()()()()(()()()()()()()))))()()()()()()()()()))()()()()()()())()()()()()()()()()()()()))()))()()¡)()()()()()()()()()()¡)()()()()()()()()))()()()()()

donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !donmt drop it !

..................................................................................................................................................................

...............................................................................................................................................................

Exp.............,..............,..........................................................................................................................

Update update !!!! Update update !!!! Update update !!!! Update update !!!! Update update !!!!Update update !!!! Update update !!!! Update update !!!! Update update !!!! Update update !!!!Update update !!!! Update update !!!! Update update !!!! Update update !!!! Update update !!!!

..........................................................................................................................................................................

.....................................................................................................................................................................

More more more more more........................................mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm chapterrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr........................................