Reviews of New life after seventeen months / New life after seventeen months

The grammar is sh*t... Really man if you saw the anime and read the webcomic is easy to evade the typos: Illegal? Evanchel? Byekuga? Just saying few... Every time you wrote Kurosaki Jr. I though you are talking about his tool(pen*s) to be honest. He, his, she, her mixed in every paragraph I still don’t know which gender everyone is... Have someone edit this if you don’t even know the basics 😑

K I'll be honest, you need to work on your grammar, your punctuation and stop copying the same paragraphs, its annoying also make it so I understand what's going on because I donk what's what at times. Your character building is good and story development is also good as is world development but remember to have someone edit your chapters so others can understand it k? 😗😗😗

I rather look into pictures of actual Sh#t and write a 10 page essay saying on how beautiful it is then read this mass wall of unreadable text

I may not be the smartest man and English is not my first language but demn... You need to fix your grammar it's hard to understand the story at all. Tho good work on the story

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